Never Gonna Tell a Soul

I had to let you know

With a poem

'Cause I'm not too good

When speaking in person

Or even over the telephone

So here's my love note

My Corazón

More than my amigo

But no O

'Cause it should of ended with ah

Feminine like the shape

Of a glass bottle of Coca-Cola

Ahhh

Giving me a rush like

The coke that used

To do backstrokes

Up into my nostrils

Ahhh

I'm putty to your hands

Do with me as you wish

My heart is play-dough

Perfect for molding

&

Lots to offer like

The mind of Plato

More like Aristotle

Whatever you say goes...

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

I like the use of the classics mixed in with modern phrase that communicate our culture- the coke glass and the coke up your nostrils- a great phrase there with the backstroke. You offer your physical self to be molded, shaped and surrendered as "putty in hands", but there is a mind there too that offers thoughts as classic and deep as Plato and Aristotle. The complete surrender of your will is scary to me, but I get it. Great poem.

[sinNsincerity]

The two elements you have pointed out is a blend I strive for, but is still not where I want it to be. It's getting there. It's an interesting piece, because yes, I do display my knowledge of the classics, in which I will be forever digging through, and modern times. I'm glad you like the backstroke phrase hehe not one of my proudest years but what the hell...
I pretty much have been an offering all my life had fought it all my life up until recently I have accepted I am not here for me, but for those who seek me. I guess the thing your eyes see and the mental tattoos that linger have forced me to surrender, but not submit completely I must say...
Thank you once again Marianne!

[Ruth]

Words in a different form, is all...appreciation is appreciation :) Lovely...

[sinNsincerity]

Yea, for some reason my mind and mouth are never on the same page.
Thank you so much Ruth!

[RomaJ]

Some times there is just no words to express, how we feel for the love of our life; especially when they hold the power to turn us into putty in their hands. They are just pure poetry. Wonderfully expressed.

[sinNsincerity]

I like being putty for those who deserve it.
Thank you for your insight Roma!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A passionate LOVE where your heart is no more your's to claim..!
You are at your lover's mercy and willingly so.
Intense piece!
Very well penned!

[sinNsincerity]

I think I will always be at a lovers mercy no matter who they are hehe
Thank you so much for letting me know what you thought Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome. I enjoyed this piece.

[AaronFreitas]

This is the ultimate romantic piece my friend! I'm gonna have to steal some of these lines and implement them to my game! haha... awesome words buddy :)

[sinNsincerity]

Go for it bro haha
Thanks!

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
I loved it!
The way you started it was just awesome!
Keep up the great work!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily

[Gee]

Enjoyed the read SinS,love both Coke references,Mae West and a sniff

[sinNsincerity]

haha Awesome! Thank you Gee!

[Bear]

I like the prospective, very good idea of letting your poetry do the talking. If you ever decide to publish I must warn you that using a products name can be big trouble. No company wants their product advertised in a bad way so they can make you change your work to their liking, in short make up a product name.

[sinNsincerity]

I have had some work published in books and I won't ever let a company scare me from saying what I want to say. I know my rights and how to use them.

[Celie Rose]

I enjoyed your poem. Nice writing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[JayceeC]

D, A nice use of analogies in this sweet little write. One problem in "My heart it playdouh" is Play-doh. The spelling of playdoh doesn't bother me. Who but the company who makes it knows that?
I really like the coke bottle reference. It's really a description from an age gone by, but describes a curvy female figure so well. Smiles here that it is back in style.
The aside about Amiga makes smile too. You could have used the correct gender to begin with, but the Ahh gives the ear a feel of relaxing into her essence.
I do so like your love poems...

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for catching those errors Jan, I just edit them.
I put a lot of thought into this one, so I'm rally glad that you enjoyed it!

[Stan Lee]

I like the comparison to coke. Fizzy and sweet :) Nice write!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!