Make a Wish

I have a fountain of quarters

In my heart from

All the times I've played love.

Each time the screen read

GAME OVER!

Forever hung over

Forever I hunger

Forever I plunder

Into the depths

Of the fountain

To be left alone with

Infinite wonder...

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Reviews

[Tashida]

Man for real you need to copyright these analogies or better yet let me steal some cuz they are seriously sooo creative. I really love your style of writing: the way you say stuff without flat out saying it. It makes for a more colorful piece.
That aside, if this is based off of real experiences, I hope you find a girl soon ;) You deserve it :)

[sinNsincerity]

This website does copyright my poems for me and I have had some of my poems in print by some publishers. And I have actually had some people on here demand that I sell them some of of my poems so they can can claim it as their own, but the never want to pay up.
I'm glad you love my style. I do try my best to make it my own and to stand out from anyone.
And thank you, I pray so as well, but at the moment I'm not looking for a women because I'm so caught up in getting my degree, but if it happens it will happen.

[Tashida]

Yea I get that... And it WILL happen (i got a feeling lol):)

[Terry O'Leary]

A penny for her thoughts...
A quarter for her heart...
I finally won the lottery...
I finally won the lottery... and so will you...

Nice poem!!

[sinNsincerity]

Touche'
Thank you Terry!

[JayceeC]

Liked the analogy that ran through this piece. The modern game of love played on a video kiosk. This felt somewhere between Mario rescuing the Princess and slots about to payout at any second. There is a short awkward feel in the transition from "forever hung over" to "forever I plunder" with the game over that precedes it. I'm not sure why, but it does not segue the way it should when read aloud.....Or maybe my brain is just slow today.
You have been missed David! Hope everything is sunny in your world!

[sinNsincerity]

That brightens my day and heart. It feels good to know that I was missed. School has been kicking my butt.

[JayceeC]

I know that feeling!!!!

[sinNsincerity]

Tell me about it haha =D

[Jamestown]

Very creative and well expressed!
Hope all is well with u my cali bro:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thanx bro, how have you been?
I've been busy with school. I'm getting ready to transfer to CSULA soon.
I broke my phone a while ago, so just message me if you like.
Here's my email. [email protected]

[Bear]

Creative and imaginative concept, the game of love and only a quarter to play (I don't know if that is a bargain or a scam, a bargain if you win early but if you never win just imagine how high that mountain of quarters would be after a life time of playing). Interesting read, it is inspiring new idea in my mind and I love when something I read does that to me :~)

[sinNsincerity]

It's a bargain and a scam and what ever you want it to be...
I'm glad that it could feed you some inspiration.

[KWP]

been a while - I see you haven't lost your touch - great work here - I can just see you depositing each quarter as you gift your love to a dead end game - soon enough you will max the point and become a winner - but what then ? SWich games?

[sinNsincerity]

I've been working on my associates in english and I'm getting ready to transfer for my b.a, but I have been sharpening my swords though...
Yes, switch games. I'm tired!

[KWP]

ahh you keep swords too - good to know :) must be a ninja like myself X

[sinNsincerity]

liquid swords! I learned the art Ninja from secret monks hehe

[sinNsincerity]

art *of Ninja

[KWP]

I learnt the art of Ninja from training in Japan with the master .... And liquid swords are the best X

[sinNsincerity]

You're too funny!
And they are aren't they!?

[RomaJ]

I completely agree with Aaron, "someday you will cash in, on all those quarters" I also enjoyed the simile...a fountain, in a heart overflowing. A beauty of a write.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for thinking so and I've glad you enjoyed it!

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome write... love the creativity you use to describe the heartbreak you've experienced. Our best days lie ahead and one day you'll cash in all those quarters when the right love finds you. Nice work buddy and glad to see your work!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Aaron, I always see the upside of things and the writing allows me to get rid of the bad s**t haha. I've been stacking poems here and there, but focusing on school right now. I'm really glad you enjoyed it though- it's been a while.
Have a good one!

[AaronFreitas]

That's awesome bro... keep doing you!