Make a Wish

I have a fountain of quarters

In my heart from

All the times I've played love.

Each time the screen read

GAME OVER!

Forever hung over

Forever I hunger

Forever I plunder

Into the depths

Of the fountain

To be left alone with

Infinite wonder...

9

Reviews

[Tashida]

Man for real you need to copyright these analogies or better yet let me steal some cuz they are seriously sooo creative. I really love your style of writing: the way you say stuff without flat out saying it. It makes for a more colorful piece.
That aside, if this is based off of real experiences, I hope you find a girl soon ;) You deserve it :)

[sinNsincerity]

This website does copyright my poems for me and I have had some of my poems in print by some publishers. And I have actually had some people on here demand that I sell them some of of my poems so they can can claim it as their own, but the never want to pay up.
I'm glad you love my style. I do try my best to make it my own and to stand out from anyone.
And thank you, I pray so as well, but at the moment I'm not looking for a women because I'm so caught up in getting my degree, but if it happens it will happen.

[Tashida]

Yea I get that... And it WILL happen (i got a feeling lol):)

[Jes' Pi]

Sweet......................

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hah well it's a game for gamers. It's how you perceive it but you gotta be good to play that game of love lol :p
I liked the rhyme sequence. Smooth read.
P.S. I'm a Cancerian and number 9 too :p ;)

[sinNsincerity]

That's cool to know. I always write about 69 and sneak it into my writing. People always think its sexual, but I use and refer to it in regards to my horoscope and a lot of other deep research I have done.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ahh well it's all about perceiving. People tend to think dirty first rather than looking at the neat side of anything ;)
I'm a strong believer of the number game, not sure about the game of love though haha ;p

[sinNsincerity]

I'm sure about love. I'm just trying to find the right one who doesn't want to kill me hehe

[Dr. YumnaKay]

haha you must be really bad if every girl wants to kill you lol jk :p
Good luck ;P

[sinNsincerity]

American women are all bad.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

errr okay ;p this public statement could get you into more trouble you know ;P ;)

[sinNsincerity]

Well it's just from my personal experience and people who grew up within my generation know what I'm talking about. I'm not to worried about trouble or being politically correct.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

um "your generation"? makes me feel either I'm too old or just a toddler haha
I know, I was kidding :p nothing wrong with saying what you feel :)

[sinNsincerity]

Well I'm almost 30 and things were different when I was growing up compared to now.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Hmm well I'm just a teeny bit younger than you 😛 I think it's still the same now...

[sinNsincerity]

And I grew up and live in East Los Angeles, things were wild and have only gotten worse, but lifestyle becomes normalized and doesn't seem odd until you look from the outside. I'm sure the same could be said everywhere around the world.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

That's true. I think everyone thinks they're in the worse possible situation but it could be more worse with someone else anywhere...

[Jessica Lima]

So many of us got that "Game Over" screen. Imagery is great here. Now, what does the 9 mean at the end of the poem?

[sinNsincerity]

Me being a Cancer. I'm a 6 and a 9, but 9 rules over every thing.
Number 9 is the number of Universal love, eternity, faith, Universal Spiritual Laws, the concept of karma, spiritual enlightenment, spiritual awakening, service to humanity, humanitarianism and the humanitarian, lightworking and lightworkers, leading by positive example, philanthropy and the philanthropist, charity, self-sacrifice, selflessness, destiny, life purpose and soul mission, generosity, a a higher perspective, romance, inner-strength, public relations, responsibility, intuition, strength of character.

The number 9 also resonates with learning to say ‘No’, creative abilities, sensitivity, loyalty, generalist, discretion, brilliance, problem-solving, inner-wisdom, self-love, freedom, popularity, high ideals, tolerance, humility, altruism and benevolence, empathy, non-conformity, artistic genius, an expansive viewpoint, eccentricity, communication, influence, perfection, magnetism, understanding, forgiveness, compassion and sympathy, the visionary, duty and calling, obligation, mysticism, optimism and Divine wisdom.


The qualities of the number 9 are those of leadership, the ability to see clearly, integration, the three worlds – physical, intellectual, spirituality, last symbol before return to unity, ability to understand, inborn talents, compulsions, introspection, personal integrity, unity, truth, the Seer, artistry, high moral sense, good advisor.perfection, concord, dissolves ego attachments, challenges faced in looking for your own wisdom.

Idealistic 9s, capable of realizing those ideals, are intensely passionate people needing to control their wild impulses.

Variously assertive, trusting, generous, selfish and willful, 9’s seriously need stabilizing influences.

In love, 9’s are romantic, ardent and impetuous.

[Jessica Lima]

Whoa! I'll never see the number 9 in the same light as before

[FIN]

Love the rhyme my man: the last seven lines flow seamlessly. Love the metaphorical imagery too. This is well done. And comprehensible. And relatable.

Much love,

LR

[Quinn W]

I love the addition of the coins in your pocket. I think it plays well off the phrase "If I had a dime." I loved this piece a lot.

[Double T]

This is cool poetry. I love the meaning behind. You are right love is not a game, it is the real deal. It is nice to see a poem with good morals behind it.

writing: 4/5
meaning: 5/5
theme: 5/5

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Double T, I'm trying to redefine such things to re-establish the essence of what has been overlooked...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Well that's the problem, love is not a game and many tend to forget this simple thing!
Very well portrayed the downfall.

[sinNsincerity]

It most certainly not a game.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Good to know that atleast a few remembers that. Liked the flow.

[Marianne Rose]

I love the image- a fountain of quarters- and the playing of the game, seeing game over again and again. It captures the effort, the addiction to playing the game of love. The last lines are moving and communicate the deep loss that is beyond a game- sure, hung over is part of the addiction, but to be left alone, infinite wonder communicates that the longing is much deeper than plundering or hungering - when you use the word infinite, it calls out the part of love that can't be relegated to addictive passion or merely physical expressions of love. Perhaps the fountain doesn't have quarters in it after all, but waters of reprenishment and change- not a wishing well type fountain at all. Loved thinking about the imagery and pondering the meaning, and what it brings up in me. Thanks!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm really glad that you loved that image and the idea of an arcade game. Pac Man-esk in a sense... Indeed it is more than a game to me and would be a fool to play with a heart in such a way; not to say that I haven't in the past. Nonetheless, I thought it would be clever, different, and something everyone can enjoy. I do.
Thank you so much for reading and spending the time to leave me your thought. They are highly appreciated and I'm really glad you enjoyed it Marianne.

[Chelsea Lavender]

Great use of words, a lot emotion is felt from reading this. Beautiful!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much C.I.L, I'm really glad that you thought so!
I highly appreciate you spending the time to read and leave a note.

[Tristesse]

Sin in Sincerity,

A lot of people can relate to this, and that is what writing should do. To have someone relate to your message is a great feeling, because it means you're not alone in feeling it. I loved it, every bit of it. Keep it up.

Best regards,
Tristesse

[sinNsincerity]

I'm more than glad that you loved it Tristesse. It is always amazing when people could relate, and I love it when people tell me what it makes them feel rather than trying to figure out what I'm saying.
Thank you for spending the time to read, I highly appreciate that!