Wishful Truth

She's the sweet sticky honey

That resides in the confines of my bee hive mind.

Oh my my my...

The residue...

My Mrs. Pooh

You roar when I don't give you a taste

of what I'm thinking...

The sum of a wishful truth.

Reviews

[Meraki]

I really like this. I understand it. I can relate to it, mainly because I do it myself. It's great. Nice work. I'm sorry it took me so long to review it. I tried reading your other requests but they were a bit to sexual for my tastes. Again, great work. Thank you for sharing this with me.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Meraki for reading, and I'm glad that you do understand it.

[Elizabeth J. Gelinger]

Short piece of poetry based on a very sweet comparison. Simple yet very meaninful, I enjoyed it very much,

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Elizabeth!

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

I think this is my favorite poem of yours! It flows smoothly, the concept has that mystery to it, but is still clear enough to understand it and appreciate it! You also use really good metaphor's. It's easy for people to fall into cliche when it comes to metaphors, but you definitely use metaphors wisely. This was beautifully written!

[sinNsincerity]

As I study writing more and more, I'm learning the art of seduction. Not to give all away, so that the reader is left wanting more. It used to take so many words for me to say something in detail, but as of late, I been obsessed with using all sorts of metaphors. One of my goals is to take what people know and see and tell them and show them something that they don't.

[Marian Elizabeth]

I saw the request just now. Sorry for the wait. Ok, so, I noticed that a comma is out of place in the first line. Sweet and sticky are adjectives describing the word honey, so there should not be a comma before honey. Also, the word beehive goes together, unless you are using your poetic license to deviate from the correct grammar.
I am also confused about the word rawr. It is an acronym for Right Answer, Wrong Reason. It is not a word on its own. Maybe you meant roar.
That's all I have to say. Good luck and keep it up.

[Reason4Rissa]

That's a cute poem, I love Winnie the pooh and I thought it was lovely

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you did!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Loved how you intertwined Winnie the pooh into this poem and made him the speaker. Such a sweet little poem. :)

[sinNsincerity]

I am pooh lol
Thanks you Lauren, I'm glad you liked it.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Oh, lol :) and your welcome :)

[Nina H.]

This is so sweet. Love it!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you do!

[Addict With a Pen]

Cute! Really gives an idea about how much you are thinking about her. The honey inside your bee hive mind, such a sweet comparison!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad you'd enjoyed it

[Polly]

Your comical way of writing poems always makes me smile, and this made me smile too. Pooh bear was indeed such a cute cartoon, and since I heard of it after such a long time, this was very refreshing, in a way. Great work! :)

[sinNsincerity]

If I can make anyone smile, then I did my job. Awesome! I'm glad it brought back old memories.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The closing line gives it the perfect shine. The coincidence: Pooh has always been a childhood favorite of mine! I had to smile as I read. :)

[sinNsincerity]

I am always exited when I get to learn something about someone, so that you for sharing that with me Fahmida. I also loved watching and reading his stories as a child. Loved how he was this chubby bear who just wanted to eat honey all day. I thought he would be perfect to use for a poem such as this one.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

And you have put your thoughts into action just about perfectly!