The Ms. who Missed Mr. Mystery

You're a beautiful butterfly

While,

I'm everything but free.

Please!

Ms...?

I love you like a second.

Miss-Stress.

No mistrust.

Do you believe in us?

I'm so stressed,

But all that can all go away

In a second.

Do you have one?

Because I have an abundance for you.

No interview.

It's quite interesting,

Rather yet,

Intriguing.

More like a mystery...

Mr.-ry..?

No need for history

'Cause we have great chemistry.

I'm an alchemist when it comes

To the development of poetry.

Turning nothing into something.

So watch your step 

When you travel across my step-less chest.

Dive in.

Please chime in

Before I have to

Die

&

Resurrect

Again...

Amen!

Reviews

[J. K. Hannah]

Your word play and twisting ideas reminds me of another author.. and it isn't coming to me who! It's so unhelpful to say, but I have an image in my head of a story s/he wrote but can't recall the full story or the author... I hope of think of them so I can let you know.

Anyway, it's a really interesting and fresh style. Fun to read but not playful- serious without being serious.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm not to sure of the writer you speak of, but now I'm curious...
I don't like to read too much which is ironic, but I just try to bring something new based on my life experiences...

[J. K. Hannah]

That is ironic! I will try to remember who it is...

[Chopstix]

"I don't like to read too much."

Does that mean you don't read much.

Counterproductive.

How can you bring something new if you don't know what others brought?

BTW "Mr. -ry" alternative "Mr. Rhee"

[sinNsincerity]

The poetry would speak otherwise and for itself.

[Bear]

I have a question, in this line "I'm an alchemist when I comes" did you mean for the word comes to be plural or did you mean for it to be "when it comes" which fits better with the next line?
Very nice word play going on here both metaphorically and esoterically for we few who look beyond the letters :~) this is very creative and fun to read, I want to thank you for inviting me it was well worth the trip.

[sinNsincerity]

Oh, thank you for catching that! I just fixed it.
I'm really glad to hear that you can find meaning beyond the words. I love meeting people with such thinking. I makes it easier to relate myself, so it's truly my pleasure to have you in my world and it sure is worth it to me. Thank you!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Awesome wordplay!! Teasing and fun.. Loved these lines: "I love you like a second. Miss-Stress. No mistrust. Do you believe in us?"
I enjoyed it!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Jyoti!
I'm really glad you love those lines. That's so amazing!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

It's a pleasure..!

[Andrew Ballard]

...Wow (Again)

Let's see here, First off, I love the wordplay that you used here (Mystery => Mr.-Ry, Miss-Stress). It was really fun to read. Also helped to reinforce my whole vision of the poem.

Speaking of which, I saw two lovers (or lovers-to-be) who did truly love each other, but *something* keeps them apart. To me, that something was along the lines of... fear?

To expand upon my idea: . Perhaps the woman is/was fearful of not knowing the man's true feelings, and so they began to drift apart. Which hurt both of them. So "Mr. Mystery" finally goes to her and tells his true feelings.

Perhaps this even happens in a church. Mr. Mystery comes across her praying alone, and kneels next to her, telling her all of this in the guise of his own prayer?

In any case, this is the scene that pops into my head, and I could be completely divergent from your vision. But the real victory here, in my opinion, is that you are again able to take so few words, and charge them with so much meaning.

More commendations, from me to you.

[sinNsincerity]

Maybe I'm the one who is fearful of showing her my true feeling because I don't want to scare her away... and I value our friendship too much! We have yet to drift apart and I pray that we never do.
I just have to take it day by day, while reading the signs...
Thank you so much Andrew, your insight is much appreciated and highly valued to me. =D

[Andrew Ballard]

Well now, knowing this, I can see this whole poem in a different light.

I wish you the best in this relationship, but I am afraid I cannot give advice. I am glad that my reviews help you.

I am even surprised that I can give (Even unknowingly) insight into relationships, especially since I have never had one myself.

In any case, you are welcome, I am glad my words help you so much.

[sinNsincerity]

I believe that you don't need to have an intimate relationship with someone to know love. That comes with simply being compassionate rather than just seeking passion. I just try to treat everyone with the up-most respect and care. Everyone deserves to know that they matter without being told by a boy/girlfriend...

[Andrew Ballard]

"Everyone deserves to know that they matter without being told by a boy/girlfriend..."

My problem. I've never felt like I mattered, always being put down in school. I try my best to be compassionate and respectful... even though I never got that myself.

[sinNsincerity]

I can relate with not getting it in return. I have always felt and still do like I don't matter, but that's nonsense. You have to realize that you do have something to offer. What helps me is not wanting anyone to know about the good I do for others. I don't want the acknowledgement because God knows what is stored inside of me. If others don't see it...I'm fine with that. It used to be so difficult for me because I love so much, I felt that no one may ever be able to repay me with the same amount, but that's selfish. Of course there are days when I want it all to be about me, but I find true happiness knowing I can make someones day, make them smile, or laugh for a moment even if they don't tell me thank you for doing so. All I truly need and what feels me up is just having someone to talk to and I a have found it easier to do so with strangers than those closest to me... I have always been a street wanderer, the ally cat, the night owl. I used to feel so alone and lost, but now I realize that that's where I'm most comfortable. Everywhere is my place, but still a mystery and I find true beauty in that enigma haha Life is crazy most of the time. The little things i receive from the world is what keeps me alive and going...wherever that is...

[Dara]

This is so very intriguing and a joy to read. I love how you played with the words. Thank you for sharing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Dara. That truly means a bunch to me!

[Jamestown]

Another fantastic piece of work!
Great flow and wonderful wording:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you man! It's those bus rides after a long night of class that gives me time to think ad write.

[Ellay]

Such a beautiful poem :) Loved the romantic vibe that it had.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Pepitro!

[Ellay]

You're welcome :D

[Devious13]

mr, mystery ... love it and its very romantic as well

good job ! love it more then ever

[sinNsincerity]

Very romantic and full of heart to me. Thank you, I'm happy you love it!

[Devious13]

as with anything real and true to the heart you cant help but appreciate the truth in this romantic tale its the lies and deceit that urk me so I am a huge fan of true love, as im sure you are well aware of the current times of society now with the social media and the jealousy lies and deceitful ways that they can affect our relationships today, its a good feeling to see or hear read of the old kind of love that was pure and last long and true , HUGE FAN BRAVOOOOOO AND ENCORE @!!!! LOVE THAT POEM

[Ruth]

Love the structure here and the yearning throughout but with insight, time waits for no-one and nothing...love or life...indeed...

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Ruth!

[....................]

Clever word play and a nice tapestry of rhyme... enjoyed this!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you FT, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[zaisham9393]

wow...........amazing ..loved the rhyme..Its a sweet poem :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Zaisha! I'm really glad you loved it.