Your word play and twisting ideas reminds me of another author.. and it isn't coming to me who! It's so unhelpful to say, but I have an image in my head of a story s/he wrote but can't recall the full story or the author... I hope of think of them so I can let you know.
Anyway, it's a really interesting and fresh style. Fun to read but not playful- serious without being serious.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
I'm not to sure of the writer you speak of, but now I'm curious...
I don't like to read too m.. read moreI'm not to sure of the writer you speak of, but now I'm curious...
I don't like to read too much which is ironic, but I just try to bring something new based on my life experiences...
interesting and fun .. word associations and play make a delightful read tho there is a very serious message ... love and lust do paint their own boundaries ... we simply fail to recognize it at times eh!? the sadness of your speaker comes through in a subtle tone for me ... experiences that still have left an empty and lost place in the heart ... we must resurrect to find ...i like the closing .... Amen! ;)
E.
This clever little piece just became a fave in my library.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I'm honored! Thank you so much Jan! This one is one of my favorites, so I'm stoked that you enjoyed .. read moreI'm honored! Thank you so much Jan! This one is one of my favorites, so I'm stoked that you enjoyed it.
I love your play with words here creating such vivid, splendid images.
"So watch your step
When you travel across my step-less chest.
Dive in."
Wow! So speechless here.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
I like to let my mind wonder where I dare not go.
And playing with words are fun once you lea.. read moreI like to let my mind wonder where I dare not go.
And playing with words are fun once you learn how to use them.
This inspires me to continue on writing such writes...
This strikes me as more of a rap, but some would say raps are urban poetry set to a beat. I love the flow and words. This is very fresh and hip (do the kids say hip anymore?), you cant help but feel the rhythm and pace of the piece.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Some others have told me the same, but I would never attempt to rap lol
I did intend to write.. read moreSome others have told me the same, but I would never attempt to rap lol
I did intend to write it in a way where the worlds would roll off the tongue with ease and a pleasure.
I'm always trying to relay how my mind thinks to you all and hope it makes some sort of sense. =D
Wow, how skilfully you juggle with words and connect ideas in here, such a pleasurable read. Was like you were rapping it, some great lyrics. Deliciously witty, absolutely loved it.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Why thank you Rana! I didn't intend for it to sound like a rap.
I just wanted it to roll off .. read moreWhy thank you Rana! I didn't intend for it to sound like a rap.
I just wanted it to roll off the tongue with ease.
Deliciously witty- I love that!
Thank you so much and I'm so glad you enjoyed it. =D