Supermarket Heart

Supermarket Heart

A Poem by sinNsincerity

Repeat

Reheat

Re-glance…


No pots or pans…


Just the vision of us

holding hands.


No shirts or pants…


Just that smile that’ll

forever relapse like

the Asian-American

sun dance.


It came with no receipt

and there was most certainly

no needs for a plastic

or paper bag...


Because we came to eat!

© 2015 sinNsincerity


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There are some really strong lines in here i am particularly in love with the

It came with no receipt
and there was most certainly
no needs for a plastic
or paper bag...

To me that shows the limitedsness of the this relationship to be served once. Great piece, the lines of this is the part that stick out the most to me, almost an illusion, like its true meaning is just peeking out. Very nice solid work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

I can't give it all away...that's for face to face convo's hehe =D



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I am eager to see a Asian-American Sundance in action.

I almost feel teased, I want more.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

That was just my cleaver way of saying sunrise and set from Cali.
And I like to play the teas.. read more
There are some really strong lines in here i am particularly in love with the

It came with no receipt
and there was most certainly
no needs for a plastic
or paper bag...

To me that shows the limitedsness of the this relationship to be served once. Great piece, the lines of this is the part that stick out the most to me, almost an illusion, like its true meaning is just peeking out. Very nice solid work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

I can't give it all away...that's for face to face convo's hehe =D
Line spacing is very pleasing, even aesthetically. Reminds me of a 'kitchen sink' revolving story. a humble and honest, light hearted love. Thanks! Willow x

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thank you Willow, I'm glad you had enjoyed it.
i really enjoyed this. the way i read this it was a little bittersweet. the only comment is "because we came to eat" didn't flow as nicely as the rest of it but it didn't take away from your writing either. maybe its because of how i read it with the exclamation point...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thank you for reading Ali and I'm glad you enjoyed it for the most part! =D
I enjoyed the wording, but the presentation of the poem made it feel a bit more disjointed to me, which took from the sensuality expressed within the piece. Also, 'like the Asian-American sun dance' phrase gave me a a bit of a stumble. I'm guessing it's another way to phrase the Natives of the Americas, but if I'm wrong, please let me know. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thanks Taylor. The Asian-American sun dance tells of the rising and setting of the sun and symbolize.. read more
Ok, you've given me a while. Time for my thoughts.

"The story of love, first found in a Grocery Store." Was that a tag line for a story, it wouldn't hold my attention. Was it the advert for a movie or TV series, I would think of a sappy Romantic Comedy, which I don't care for.

But again, your ability to weave words makes me create with that tag, and stick with it. Also allows me again to see my own thoughts.

The story (That I saw)- Th memory of a lover who met his other in a grocery store, They hit it up, and never finished speaking as they left to go to one of their houses for some food. Now, it was reheated in the microwave, without pots or pans, because they had bought no food.

This leads (Somehow) to a night of passion, and the next day they get up and leave to eat breakfast at a diner, as they (she) now has no food in her house.

Commendations again, from me to you.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

The title just came to mind because I was talking about grocery shopping with the women I wrote this.. read more
Andrew Ballard

9 Years Ago

I love the way you charge your words with meaning.

And like I say, I do not know your.. read more
sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

I don't even know my mind haha and I don't think I ever will...
That's why I follow my heart .. read more
A happy write. It seems! Love the quirkiness.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

I'm glad to hear so hon. Thank you so much for reading.
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I love it
so playful

So light


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thank you thinking so as well as reading!
interesting place you travel through...i love it the feel, the smell, the nakedness.wonderful!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thank you Jeannemarie!
I really the meaning!
Keep it up!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

9 Years Ago

Thank you Emily!

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