Can of Snakes

Her smile sproutly sprung

at me like a can of snakes;

She never put the snakes

back into the can.

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

You're quickly becoming one of my favourites on here.

Straight to the punch, just how I like them. "She never put the snakes/back into the can." So few words, yet so much to chew on. How often we're so blinded by the smiles that we don't see the forked-tongues in their mouths.

Also: I need to commend you on the sibilance in that first line. You, sir, have a way with words.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you very much, I thought you may have liked this one.
I love using consonances, dissonances, alliteration, and etc..., so thank you for noticing that. I really am glad you had enjoyed it Alice.

[raven]

you're so good at this!! you use words so masterfully yet playfully at the same time, never failing to crate a magical atmosphere full of symbolism and metaphors. Love your work!

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Rea, I study really to seek that balance, so I appreciate you noticing.

[raven]

you are doing a great job at it my friend, if you keep it up you will surely reach high positions and more appreciation!

[Shae]

Oh, they need to go back! Lol! Love it!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Shae, I'm glad you love it!

[Shae]

You're welcome! Keep up the magic hun! :-)

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Sproutly sprung ... snaps dude snaps.

Great one. I love the short free verses that punch you in the gut and leave you feeling.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Crystal!

[Alfred Kukitz]

and wrapped around your head never never letting go.

Regards,
Al

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Al!

[Terry O'Leary]

The question is...
whether the snakes can and will...

interesting poem!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Terry!

[EileenM]

Danger attracts, doesn't it? Ya wants the prize, ya takes ya chances...

[sinNsincerity]

hehe thank you for reading Eileen.

[B]

Maybe you just don't want to lol

[sinNsincerity]

I really don't...

[jeannemarie coulter]

nor would i...lol...well penned

[sinNsincerity]

Right!
Thank you!

[Emily]

Haha!
Nice poem!
Well done!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily!