Eardrum

Hubba hubba.

Hubble eyes...

All I see is star light

When I tap into

my third mind.

Lub- lub!

My love?

Can you hear?

It’s my heart’s love

banging on

your eardrum.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! What a load of intriguing imagination here! I can't believe this. I love it when someone surprises me with a novel approach to writing love poems (so many love poems are so similar!) Excellent use of onomatopoeia to SHOW instead of tell, based on SOUND, which goes with your theme so perfectly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Margie, that's magic. I'm always thinking of new ways to write to stand out from the rest. Love is Love.

[Anna]

I like this one. Very simplistic and sweet.

[Haley]

This was a great read. Great use of rhyming, also, great placement of the words you used.

[Einstein Noodle]

what a big smile reading this gives me ... hubba Hubble ..love it .. the simplicity and almost childlike feelings to this love poem keep it light and endearing .. very enjoyable read ... sometimes love can be a very simple thing :))))))))))))))))))))
E.

[JessyJacob]

"Yes yes I can see myself in your eyes.
Yes yes I can hear your shout with a big hug".

Cute few words, expressed entire love on Her.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Sometimes we need to feel in order go hear the hearts request... third mind deeper senses all awake the true love within us - we just need to know where it is and what it sounds like- different and intriguing🌹

[Davidgeo]

Everything about us is made from stardust. I do love poems like these.

[sinNsincerity]

But are we JUST star dust alone . . . ?

[Davidgeo]

The juries still out on dark matter and energy. It seems we really don't know what about 70-80% of the universe is. The more we find out the less clear the picture becomes. Socrates said something like "the only thing I know is that I know nothing", I think that fits well with our current progress of understanding.

[Relic]

Well done. Starlight is a sign of good things to come.

[Mikku]

Short and very sweet piece of work.. 😊

[Cherrie]

So when she says you give me an ear ache, it's a good thing. :)

[¿]

It's not sstammering words it's the restlessness! Great!!!