Eardrum

Hubba hubba.

Hubble eyes...

All I see is star light

When I tap into

my third mind.

Lub- lub!

My love?

Can you hear?

It’s my heart’s love

banging on

your eardrum.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! What a load of intriguing imagination here! I can't believe this. I love it when someone surprises me with a novel approach to writing love poems (so many love poems are so similar!) Excellent use of onomatopoeia to SHOW instead of tell, based on SOUND, which goes with your theme so perfectly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Margie, that's magic. I'm always thinking of new ways to write to stand out from the rest. Love is Love.

[Dianne S Penfold]

It has very cartoon like imagery. I can almost picture the animation of the heart coming out of the chest. What a fun read!

[John the Baptist]

Space connection is quite imaginative. I'll have to start wearing my hearing aid again.

[sinNsincerity]

Thanks for reading this one John. One of my favorite writes.

[noname]

I love how much you are able to express in such a short stanza.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Jas]

I love this, makes me think of my love, and the sound of his heart beat

[Neville]

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[sinNsincerity]

What...........?

[Neville]

The language of a pc crash methinks.... am so sorry... now then, let me try and start again.... great write and thoroughly enjoyed the read.... there ya go........ Neville

[BBP]

Your poems always read like a game of falling dominoes...one line just falls right in to the next. Always a good read.

[sinNsincerity]

The art of non sexual seduction in writing is something i try to master and build on. How can i lure you in, build you up, and leave you wanting more . . .

[BBP]

You do it well. Always got a street rap vibe to it that makes it that much more enticing to me.

[sinNsincerity]

Although I don't try to make is sound as a rap, I do appreciate that. I've just study sounds, rhythm, pace, alliteration, assonance, consonance, metaphor, mood, tone, foreshadowing, hyperbole, irony, onomatopoeia, symbolism, personification, oxymoron, paradox, etc . . . in school and within my own studies. I do whatever it takes to get better.

[BBP]

good for you. and sorry street rap is a compliment, just means its got flow and rhyme and heart.

[sinNsincerity]

No need for sorry's, I'm not offended at all.

[BBP]

LOL good cause I'm not really sorry lol

[sinNsincerity]

Love is love. (shot in the heart)

[BBP]

Sarcasm is love. Lol

[sinNsincerity]

As long as it's all love

[Gee]

My mum used to say to me.." sarcasm is the lowest form of wit, and if wit were s**t you'd be constipated"....evening folks

[sinNsincerity]

Did she give you suppositories? hahaha

[Gee]

Lol, yep. Nearly choked on one, tasted like sh..

[sinNsincerity]

That's gross dude, why would you eat those. They go in your butt . . . lol

[Gee]

Maaaaaaannnnnnn, that explains a lot

[BBP]

Lol I agree with you mum ... I’m a lowlife sarcastic a*****e lmao

[sinNsincerity]

This thread is awesome hahaha
Love you guys!

[Gee]

Every build meeting I attend with my boss starts with." Don't not say anything Gee "

[BBP]

LMAOOO Whenever it's a sensitive situation, I get told the same thing... that or.."Just be nice Bev." lol

[Tabby Mac]

This is sweet and brings many thoughts to my mind as I read. Well done!
Tabby

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Tabby, always a pleasure. Would love to hear those thoughts . . .

[Tabby Mac]

I pictured two lovers. One resting their head on the others chest in the moonlight. Beautiful!

[sinNsincerity]

That's really awesome.

[Tabby Mac]

Thank you! HAHA well it was your poem that spurred my mind!
Tabby

[sinNsincerity]

Love is love. Have a splendid day Mrs. Mac

[Tabby Mac]

You too! Enjoy!

[Brittany]

I actually enjoyed the lightheartedness and simplicity here. And it has nice rythm. It was an enjoyable read on this sunny afternoon.

[charmel]

sweet.. simple yet it gives a vivid picture of someone who's inlove