Go in Peace

Cruelly, Brutally, Honest About Myself.

Ask Me Anything…

Not An Open Book, But I’m Off The Shelf;

Sitting In Plain View, Knock Off The Dust & See For Yourself.

Saying Bless You With No Tissue, My Offer To The Future Cause You Have To Save Your Self To Deal With Yourself Issues.

Walking Up An Incline, At A Steady Pace & The Sun Will Still Never Be Mine Even If I Brush My Teeth With It, Using It As Tooth Paste.

I’m First But In A Race With Myself, Does That Place Me In Last Place?

A Heavenly Nightmare,We All Like The Thrill Of Being Scared.

Well At Least That’s Just Me, If You Spark Up The Weed, I Can Tell You Everything!

No Secrets, I Can Keep It All To Myself But Forget Cleavage, I Rather Show You My Bare Nakedness Like Victoria’s Secrets.

My Good Wisdom & Faith, Bound Up As One To Conclude My Vision Of The World.

Always Calm, In A Disaster I’ll Be Fast Asleep.

Dreaming Deeply That I’m A Living Disaster, Wait… Which Is Reality?

Let Us See…

When I Close My Eyes & Enter My Dream;

Is This Me Really Opening My Eyes To Start My Day?

Waking Out Of The Dream, Is That Me Really Going To Bed & Starting The Dream?

My Wonder Is You, I Told You Before That I’m A Sleepless Disaster With My Body Awaiting A Rapture But Which Life Would My Soul Capture?

Keeping A Silent Speech Will Only Be The Death Of Me, A Small Stumble, I’m Humble, Not Responding, To Pay No Mind To The Mindless Questions Fired At Me.

Throw Me Overboard, For It’s My Fault That This Storm Has Come To Be.

I Destroyed The Boards That Would Of Build The Ship To Take Me To A New Shore.

A Desperate Lost?

Sacrificing My Voice, Knowing Where My Salvation Is.

Spreading My Word Through Writings, That’s How I Know I Can Find You & Wish That Maybe One Day That You’ll All Come Back To Me.

Seventy Times Seventy Chances, That’s How Many I’ll Give You With A Stack Of Thank Yous!

Nothing Like You Promised, Change You Mind But I Wouldn’t Want To Change You.

My Hunger Is Beyond Food, A Craving That Gives Me No Need To Chew.

Displeased Exceedingly, Is It Right For Me To Be Angry When You Don’t Want Me To?

I Have The Right To Do Anything But I Have The Right Sense Of Mind & Heart To Forgive & Forget About The Non Important Things Like The Gum Stuck Under My Shoe.

A Vine With The Blessings Of The Sun Growing Upward To Block The Sun & Not Allowing The Shine To Reach The Things Beneath.

What Does That Make You Think?

Knowing My Left Hand From My Right, I’m Not Always Knowing What Is Right, This Is Life.

Would You Rather Die With All Or Be The One Who Is Blessed To Survive While Witnessing All Of The Death?

All Or Nothing, Nothing Or All?

Either Way, You’ll Have Something.

Wideness Of Mercy, If You Fail, You Die.

Don’t Be Afraid, Live It Up Today!

This Is What I Have To Say…

Reviews

[Maja]

Okay, the format of the poem confused me. It felt like I was reading titles because of the capitalization. BUT, I absolutely love how you were able to make it all come together. This reads like spoken word poetry, and I am a huge fan of that. Seriously, this is my favorite writing of yours.

Some corrections/ suggestions:

... You Have To Save Yourself To Deal With Your (Self) Issues. --> if you really want to do the wordplay thing

[I'd] Rather Show You My [Barenakedness] Like Victoria’s Secrets.

I Destroyed The Boards That Would [Have Built] The Ship To Take Me To A New Shore.

Spreading My Word Through Writings, That’s How I Know I Can Find You & Wish That Maybe One Day [That] You’ll All Come Back To Me. --> no need for the word that, really

Nothing Like You Promised, Change [Your] Mind But I Wouldn’t Want To Change You.

I Have The Right To Do Anything But I Have The Right Sense Of Mind & Heart To Forgive & Forget About The [Unimportant] Things Like The Gum Stuck Under My Shoe.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Maja. I always trying to do things differently.

[Curls]

I had difficulty reading this.. Maja suggested this poem to me and I think I know why. It speaks to me in a way that I feel like you're telling my story in a poetic way (did that make sense?).

Btw, I like this part : I’m First But In A Race With Myself, Does That Place Me In Last Place?

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that she did and that it could speak to you! That's awesome!

[dan]

I'm sorry but my disorders prevent me from focusing on writes this long. I'm very sorry...dan

[jeannemarie coulter]

your images appear like jagged rocks, islands you climb on to view and evaluate life as if moves past at differing speeds...a rushing whirlpool that spits you out to ask some deep questions of the rest of us...a broken thread tapestry style that manages to fit together and create a complete weaving...i think it works well...

[sinNsincerity]

I thank you with my heart to see it in such a way. You have most certainly made my day!

[Saddam]

What Does That Make You Think?
Knowing My Left Hand From My Right, I’m Not Always Knowing What Is Right, This Is Life.

Good reading friend.
Many things are there for think.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you. It was like I was in a trance hehe.
I actually added something to that line. Tell me what you think.






Knowing My Left Hand From My Right, I’m Not Always Knowing What Is Right 'till you see what you have left, This Is Life.

[Sarah Hampton]

There are several good sentences here and an abundance of interpretation. I have been blessed with the curse of surviving too many already. Lord have mercy.

[sinNsincerity]

I highly appreciate it Sarah. Thank you.

[Angela Sparks]

This is very beautiful, got a little confused on the format just a little but I really loved the flow of the rhythm and the words themselves all run together beautifully:)

[Angela Sparks]

*rhyme
(Sorry mis spell)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Angela!

[wordman]

well you poured it all out,how much weed did this cost

[sinNsincerity]

Not much hehe

[Stephen Scaggs]

Like Maja, this is a nice piece of spoken word poetry. The format also can be confusing. Like there needs to be more punctuation, quotation marks to separate phrases. I think perhaps that the train of thought veers off course somewhat. The title says "Go in Peace", but then it kind of muddles up the waters a tad bit by all these abstract images that your mind has to individually connect with the title. I like the poem, but I'm not sure I can "get a handle" on it. Thanks for sharing!

Review: 9.0/10.

[MsJewel]

"Don't be afraid, live it up today" - I love this line - we never know what tomorrow will bring. Your words are wise and inspiring.

:) Julie

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Julie!