An Evening in God's Den

I said, 

great,"

looks

"heaven

but...

I wasn’t tooo

hesitant to 

make 

it 

back 

P

u

while we were wake n’ bakin’.

Baby, tell me is it a sin because 

we’re living in God’s den

and all I can think about 

is you and I naked?

Adam and Eve 

made the devil 

easy to believe,

so would you 

be shocked that 

I’m on my knees

ready to please.

Please!

Let us be at ease?

Sometimes I like to play the tease ---

fulfilling all of your fantasies.

It ain’t hard to tell ---

creating paintings with the vacant.

Space can never get in our way;

face -- ecaf

eyes never blinking

creating a for never ending ecstasy

The way you bite my neck has my lip quivering.. ..

;=-0998

They must be mistaken 

to think 

that I 

have made 

a 

mistake.

The angels will have to come and 

rip 

m

 

e 

a

 

w

a

v

/

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You must of got lost. Not God's den.
"The way you bite my neck has my lip quivering!
They must be mistaken to think that I have made a mistake .
The angels will have to come and rip me away."
Good flow of thoughts led to the very nice ending. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

It is God's den, that's the irony...
Thank you for reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Myenigma]

i like it, a retelling of the genesis story, but with an inverted nature and identity of the man.

[sinNsincerity]

More of an over identity of himself and sort of post Revelations. Rather than entering heaven and being outcast again, he remains an outcast. Just fine with what he's doing and where he is.

[Myenigma]

Oh i get it :)

[Wasekera S Chiphazi Ban..]

very nice poem .. Great job

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[marcus]

Who needs heaven, you're already there!

[sinNsincerity]

That's what I'm saying.

[Emily]

What a great idea for a poem!
Keep it up!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily!

[Tanya]

Great poem, flowed well, and right to the point. "Adam and Eve made the devil easy to believe, so would you be shocked that I’m on my knees ready to please." Would have to be one of the many awesome lines in this poem. Kudos!

[sinNsincerity]

Yea I love that line and I'm glad it stood out!
Thank you so much for reading Tanya.

[Tanya]

Your welcome.

[JayceeC]

I find it ironic that it is the physical act of love and lust that makes people feel closest to Heaven. Note I said Heaven, not God. So while the title may seem a misnomer, I get it.

[sinNsincerity]

I wrote this to symbolize the fact that I am only a man and have accepted everything rather being shameful. I'm saying heaven can wait because I like here.
Thank you for reading Jan!

[Frozen Eyes]

Lovely,lustful and I wonder if Adam & Eve read this would they need the forbidden fruit at all!!

[sinNsincerity]

That would have totally been better, but that's why I wrote this. To symbolize how when they ate it- they felt shame, so us, we eat the fruit on countless occasions and I wanted to show how I have and still do overcome that shame by accepting the fact that I'm going to sin. Do I intend to? No, but I still do for my selfish reasons.
I can never change who I am. I will always be a man. All I can do is surrender myself everyday and try to correct my old mistakes...

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

The flow and rhythm of this piece is sex itself. This is wonderful and one of my favorites. Truly. The passion seeps though and fill the reader with swells of emotions. It was explicit with out being vulgar, it was lustful but so tender and loving. There is a truly great blend of bliss and sin. GREAT JOB! There were parts that made me blush, but more than made me smile.

[sinNsincerity]

That's amazing! Thank you Crystal, I love hearing that.

[B]

We are all living in God's Den
In his mercy
aren't we

[sinNsincerity]

Very much so...

[Saddam]

Sometimes I like to play the tease ---
fulfilling all of your fantasies.
It ain’t hard to tell ---

It is a well-well write poetry.
Great description of thought.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!