Wonder Lust

You left me breathless

when you asked,

“Do you like my

necklace?,” as

you escalated your

fingers down from

your left collar

bone towards your cleavage.

The center piece...

Heart exceeding because

a dose of you is

extremely needed!

Please my dear, I’m

in dire need

of O D-ing!

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

Lovely write! Can sense the passion between the lines...

However, I'm not sure whether "escalate" is the right word for what the fingers did......yes, maybe the situation escalated.......and that is quite a pivotal verb in the poem.....so I cannot suggest an alternative, but that's what I got in my first reading.....

Towards the end of the poem, it got a "rap" vibe, where my feet started to tap, but then it stopped.....as if there was more to come....

Great work!

[sinNsincerity]

Escalate as in an escalator. They go up as well as down. Hence her fingers moving downward.
That pretty sweet that you got that vibe. I just used rhythm and pace.
But I stopped it short.
That's part of the seduction.
Always leave them wanting more.

[annalysiar]

Very well paced. I enjoyed reading this

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you once again!

[annalysiar]

Oh no problem. Most times the best imagination to make a poem like this is with short sweet words and you captured that beautifully

[sinNsincerity]

I really appreciate that. I try so hard to write what I see in my head with the hope the you all will be able to see parts of that.

[annalysiar]

That's Amazing... it's flattering to read raw writing

[sinNsincerity]

Well, I am flattered that you enjoy my poems and I will keep working on getting better.

[annalysiar]

Spoken like a true artist. I can't wait to read more

[sinNsincerity]

Don't day that, 'cause I will read request you everything... hehe

[annalysiar]

Oh I will I have no life. My time flow is endless lol

[sinNsincerity]

Either do I outside of school lol
But I will most definitely look through some of my older ones that I think you'll like...

[annalysiar]

Oh thank you thst will help me tremendously

[sinNsincerity]

It would be my pleasure!

[annalysiar]

😀😀😀why thank you kind sir😊

[Tessa Melendez]

Well, that escalated. Lol a little bit anyway. Interesting piece, Sincerity. Provides pretty good imagery and allows the reader to feel the racing of the persona's heart as the description proceeds. Great work.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Tessa!

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

Your poems kind of remind me of Nikki Giovanni's book of love poems titled "bicycles," because they express so much emotion in just a few sentences, which I love. Its one of the reasons why Giovanni is one of my favorite poets.

[sinNsincerity]

I just looked looked her up and thank you for introducing me to her. I will most definitely look into her writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the energy and the drive of these words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Coyote!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Nina H.]

Great piece! The ending has left me wanting to read more. Intriguing indeed.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nina, I'm glad that you did .

[Davidgeo]

It's really good man. The words fit almost perfectly. Too short though, you can extend the goodness. Re find and recycle a little of that imagination you happened to be using that day. If you can.

I wouldn't stop working on this one.

[sinNsincerity]

I intentionally left it short. I would have to take you to bed to shoe you the rest.

[sinNsincerity]

.....*Show

[Davidgeo]

I trust you made the right choice.

[TaraNicole]

I agree with M.L.Francello.. a great piece indeed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Tara, I'm glad that you'd enjoyed it.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

This poem has a comical side and a beautiful sense throughout the whole this. Showing the love between two people. A very good poem :)

[sinNsincerity]

if i would have continued, it would have gotten x rated

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Omg lol well it is still beautiful :)

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Sensuous. Your artistic delivery words. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I try my best to close my eyes and upon up the memory as vivid as the experience was. In a piece like this one, I just wanted everyone to see and feel what I did an a split second.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Totally worth appreciating.