Quasimodo

Nothing has ever been bluer

than the black lining

that lays over my

back.

I took a step back

to allow the blues a

moment to display its recap.

The weight of the world

on my shoulders...

Mr. Hunchback!

Wrapping myself within

a black linen while

pretending to be the

hero and the villain.

I’ve been down for

a minute…

Depression,

Here’s a second,

tick, tick, tock…

Talk!

Reviews

[dan]

A very creatively thought out premise with Quasimodo serving as a metaphor for those who in some way do not fit in. When depression is upon a person that feeling of alienation is ever present. Not to mention that gigantic weight; carrying the world can prove quite cumbersome. Nicely written! take care...dan

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Dan!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

That is a very interesting way of analogizing Quasimodo's predicament with the gravity of depression. I thought that was very original and definitely, heartfelt as usual.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Nadia, I wanted to compare and display the depression I feel in relation to Quasi.

[alf]

Hi Sin. Great how you have taken the weight of the world and used it to convey those feelings of being down!! This is a suprb read!!! alf

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Alf, I highly appreciate it!

[Carrie.]

Quasimodo, the partly formed and fully misshapen, fitting the poem well.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Carrie!

[Elisa]

This is probably one of my favorite poems from you thus far. The metaphor with Quasimodo and the black linen are so well woven into the poem, and they're not forced at all. You let those metaphors carry the emotion. You showed and didn't tell. Absolutely wonderful! You should submit this into a contest.

[sinNsincerity]

Wow, you really think I should? I will try to find one to enter it in.
Thank you Elisa, you made my day because I've been trying really hard to get my writing to a certain point of where I want it to be, but my thinking of how it should be keeps evolving lol

[Confuser]

Sin in Sincerity: Clever, great imagery. I enjoyed it very much. Quasimodo, that visual brings forth such honor, but then as history took his gifts away; changed to the "American" way your poem's emotional strenth is powerful - to show depression in that way - great imagery. Thinking of how he must how felt. Well done. Thank you very much. Dale

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Dale. I love reading your insight and I appreciate it!

[Confuser]

My pleasure!

[JayceeC]

This is a clever description of depression and being down. I wonder if the Hunchback was really Atlas in disguise? Great creative write Sin.

[sinNsincerity]

Zeus punished him to hold the weight of the heavens on his shoulders, so who knows...
Interesting take though =D

[Kathryn Smith]

I just wrote about feeling like the Hunchback too! (Long story)

I can't say I know exactly how you feel..but I can say I relate. Being under the weight of living is the worst some days.

I love the tick tick tock talk part!

Well done! xo :)

[sinNsincerity]

Wow, what a trip. Our minds were linked up for a second.
The "talk" sort of yells at you doesn't it?

[Angela Sparks]

I loved th is:) using quasimoo as an example for the feeling, stress, etc of being different and having to carry all that with you^-^ very well wrote

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Angela, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

[Melinda McQueen]

Take a breath, put your hand on your heart....exhale.
Feel that? That's purpose.
A nice write you have penned.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Melinda!

[wordman]

black or blue depression can only get you for a minute
keep your head up my friend

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you my friend.

[wordman]

you are welcome