Dumb Smitten

Our long desired kiss

created a distance.

We were best friends.

What made it so

different?

Vaness…,

I’m a mess.

I miss…

The single thought of

what could have been.

It was so much more

than bliss!

Days out

Days in

We made it our business

to say, “I love you,”

when we both needed it.

I left you my heart at the

movie theater water fountain.

Do you remember it?

I hope that you never forget it.

I haven’t…

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Nadia B.]

I feel a sadness for unrequited love but similarly a happiness for one to experience such a deep connection. Perhaps some would prefer never to go through moments like this but I feel one hasn't truly grown until they have yearned for another's heart and really felt what it means to be in love. Also your style of writing has a purity to it that I really enjoy, please don't stop writing! ...and I hope one day that the one the poem is about might either be united forever with this friend or better yet find one who can out do such a lovely memory, for that person would then be the best, far better than any friend.

[sinNsincerity]

You are so right, I read this quote last night, "Blessed are the hearts that can bend; they shall never be broken. -Albert Camus, but like you said... if the heart does't break... how can we learn and we can't learn... how will we ever grow to better oneself?
This is why I'm not afraid to leave myself so open because I'm ready to grow so much. I have always felt greatness inside of me, but I have always shunned it away as if I wasn't worthy enough. But truly, we are all worthy and have greatness inside of us.
For the one I wrote this for, Vanessa, we were tremendous best friends and we both nurtured it. It came to a point we realized, "hey, we take care of each other so well, why not go out on a date and give this a shot..." Some how we remained friends and as time went on we lost touch and got lost in the world, which lead me to ponder on what could of been...
Thank you so much Nadia! Your input always gets me thinking and going. I love when you speak you mind to me because it allows us to get more into dept and discuss more of what is written.

[Nadia B.]

That is a beautiful quote, and I'm sorry to hear you were left to wonder what might have been. Still you were both brave to take the leap of faith and see where things might go, it always better and braver to try than not try at all. At least you never have to live with that regret. You are right there is a little golden star in all of us and I'm so happy to see you let yours shine, helps make the world a brighter place, and truly thats what I believe makes poets so important. So please never stop writing and I will do my best to continue our discussions so we can both grow from all the food of thought. Wish you well and many blessings!

[sinNsincerity]

I can't help to wonder se was and I hope to God that she still is a beautiful soul!
It was a leap of faith and I always carried a bundle of what ifs, so I promised myself never again.
I write till my death because it's the last bit of me that I have left to offer.
I look forward to our literary brunches...

[sereenaoutloud]

This is a beautiful but sad write
Some people are our best friend and not meant to be anything more :(

[sinNsincerity]

Sadly, this is very true...

[Rana]

There's some kind of an intangible rhythm in this one that adds to the flow and beauty, sketching the tale vividly. Wonder what her side of the poem would be like. Nice write!

[sinNsincerity]

I would love to hear her side as well. Vanessa was one of my dearest friends. We both knew it was more that that, but we always seemed to be dating someone else and the timing was never right.
But one day we had a chance to date, "the movie theater water fountain," and everything went great that day. After that night it went back to being friends. Wish I could go back...

[Rana]

Aw. Wish she read this poem. Maybe the missing piece to the puzzle would find it's place then. =)

[Krystal Jones]

This poem has the quality of dark chocolate. Bittersweet, you can feel the ache and desire in it.

[sinNsincerity]

I like the sound of that!

[Sindu]

Amazing write! Your poems are cryptic yet clear, straight to point.

We made it our business
to say, “I love you,”
when we both needed it.... I can't figure out if this is sweet or sad

... =)

[sinNsincerity]

It's both...

[Sindu]

Ok then, sadly sweet

[wordman]

and this my friend is what memories are made of

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading SIr!

[dan]

SiS, You seem to have your own style of writing. The format you favor is very reader-friendly and almost conversational. This tends to personalize your pieces and make them more accessible, a bit simpler to look for its meaning. Please don't take that badly. Simpler in your case does not make it any less powerful and effective. Your unique style is your signature. Sign lots of autographs with that. take care...dan

[sinNsincerity]

I would never take offense. I respect what you have to say Dan.
I really enjoyed your review!

[erinwrites]

Literally going through something like this right now haha! Loved how "to the point" it was, very well written my friend :)

[sinNsincerity]

Wow, it sucks though becasue you don't want to ruin the friendship huh...

[erinwrites]

That's exactly it

[Jamestown]

Well penned!
Straight forward and sweet sentiment:)
really enjoyed reading this and thanks for sharing!
PTL!

[sinNsincerity]

Thanks for reading James!

[JayceeC]

Sweet, sad and melancholy. This is a bit more straightforward than some of your other poems, but it still pulls at the heart of the reader.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Jan.

[Ishita Dixit]

So much like my story!
Kissing your best friend might not always turn out to be good. :
I loved it!
And congrats! Two of your poems are in today's top writings list!

[sinNsincerity]

Sadly it isn't lol
Wow really, I haven't noticed. I don't think they shows up when I check though.