Goldilocks

Time is snoring...Zzzz…

And I’m snoring after a

stolen meal of porridge.

The beast came and

awoken me.

Moma bear is very

pleased with what

she sees.

She says she loves,

but truly,

She’s plotting on devouring

me!

Reviews

[Nadia B.]

This poem actually scared me, and I don't scare so easily in poetry, but you write so well! I like how you personify time in sleep, and compare it to a thief, the sly grin of someone who seems pleased, but is waiting to turn into a beast. Your last line is full of power evoking feelings of fear and tread and worry, that brings the whole story to life and makes it real. Really well done!

[sinNsincerity]

That's just great and made me smile!
Thank you Nadia!

[Angela Sparks]

This is a very cute poem
"She says she loves,
but truly,
She’s plotting on devouring
me!"
Would have to be my favorite part. It made me laugh and made my crappy day better:)

[sinNsincerity]

Wow, really!?
I'm glad that it did so. =D

[Pratik Mishra]

Very enjoyable. Your ideas are really good. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!
I wrote this to symbolize how much I take from the world and what she would do if I don't give back to her...

[B]

Lol
I am laughing
So a positive simple review

Laughter :P

[sinNsincerity]

I'm really glad that it made you laugh.
I wrote this to symbolize how much I take from the world and what she would do if I don't give back to her...

[Ankita]

oooo moma bear seems angry :P
hhha nice one :D

[sinNsincerity]

When she wants to be... =D
I wrote this to symbolize how much I take from the world and what she would do if I don't give back to her...

[Ankita]

nice...deep thought :D

[Francesca Ciara]

Short and simple but really entertaining.. 'twas a pleasure reading this

[sinNsincerity]

'Twas an honer hearing from you Francesca!

[nazia]

A cute little fairy tale. This one made me smile XD

[sinNsincerity]

I'm smiling knowing that you did. =D
I wrote this to symbolize how much I have taken from the world and what It would do to me if I don't reach into the world and start giving back...

[nazia]

You are already giving a lot back to the world in the form of these lovely poems...

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nazia. This means so much.

[wordman]

mama bear loves what she sees,a t bone with blue jeans lol

[sinNsincerity]

Hahaha too funny sir!

[Melinda McQueen]

Time is snoring. ....yes indeed.
Mama bear's tummy is growling!
A creative write.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Melinda!

[Brinleigh Bailey]

Very cute and light, I enjoyed it very much.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Miss Bailey!
I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

[dan]

I feel as if I'm back in the second grade...we didn't have computers then. Cute write. take care...dan

[sinNsincerity]

This poem symbolizes how much I take from the world and if all I do is take, the world will take back what's hers...
Not to sure if everyone will see it that way.
I thought the Goldilocks tale would play well with that.
Thank you for reading Dan!