Goldilocks

Time is snoring...Zzzz…

And I’m snoring after a

stolen meal of porridge.

The beast came and

awoken me.

Moma bear is very

pleased with what

she sees.

She says she loves,

but truly,

She’s plotting on devouring

me!

Reviews

[Nadia B.]

This poem actually scared me, and I don't scare so easily in poetry, but you write so well! I like how you personify time in sleep, and compare it to a thief, the sly grin of someone who seems pleased, but is waiting to turn into a beast. Your last line is full of power evoking feelings of fear and tread and worry, that brings the whole story to life and makes it real. Really well done!

[sinNsincerity]

That's just great and made me smile!
Thank you Nadia!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Awesome retelling of the fable...humorous yet frightening all at once!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nadia!

[alf]

hahahaha!!! So very far from your usual introspective writes, and a very enjoyable read!!! Would love to know where your muse came from for this one!!! Just so loved the lightness and the way you revived old memories!!! alf

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Alf!
I wrote this one on the bus. Most of my works are produced when I'm on the bus to school and back home. I don't have a muse that inspires me to write. I have so many things in my head that want to get out. I write about one percent of them down. The rest I simply let go because at times the desire isn't there...

[alf]

Know exactly where you are coming from, Sin!!! I write about 10-15 a day and still can't get everything down!!! I think we may share the same problem!!! Hee hee!!!

[sinNsincerity]

There will never be enough time to write it all down.
The beautiful this is that I don't exist in time when I'm in the writing process. It's hard to explain...

[alf]

I'm with you, though!!! I lose hours in a day

[sinNsincerity]

Really though!

[Elisa]

I love that this can be interpreted in so many ways, depending on the childhood experiences of the reader. I also enjoyed the element of fantasy intertwined in your expression of emotion.

[sinNsincerity]

It can be interpreted into so many ways, I see so many different things each time I read it.
Thank you Elisa!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I read something sinister in this. Like your in too deep and know its gonna end bad, but your too late to turn back. ADORE the theme and relating it to such a great fairy tale story really made the piece relateable. Great Job

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you got that out of the poem!
I wrote this to symbolize how much I take from the world and what could become of me if I don't reach into the world and start giving back.

[JayceeC]

Sin love this. You have a noun verb agreement prob though. " The beast come (s) and awaken (s) me. Hope you can run fSt my friend!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Jan. I'm happy that you enjoyed it!

[jeannemarie coulter]

delightful writing, creates a solid image...well done

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading!

[Krystal Jones]

Interesting perspective... It almost feels to me like this one is incomplete in some way. But I like the twist about the momma at the end.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading hon!

[sereenaoutloud]

Lol this made me smile and of course took me back to the childhood days and that nursery rhyme , but as i read it a few time (yeh i do that too lol) i was thinking little goldilocks she just took, so whose porridge did you take and who do you need to pay back?

[sinNsincerity]

I wrote this to symbolize how much I take from the world and what could become of me if I don't reach into the world and start giving back.

[Rana]

This was something very cute. Did bring me flashbacks of little me reading the tale all engrossed and feeling irate for the baby bear whose porridge was eaten, chair was broken and bed was slept in. Huh, Goldilocks deserves to be eaten. Or ok, atleast be taught her lessons. I'm surprised realizing there's actually more to the story than I ever thought. Quite an unexpectedly thought-provoking profound poem, Sin. Cryptic!

[sinNsincerity]

So many stories play out in my mind when I read this it's so funny.
I was hoping it would take some people back to a time when everything was beautiful, but not really...