Theatrical Scene ~ Infinity

Future, present, and past…

The days will everlast.

Relapse?

More like a nightcap

Mr. bottle caps

Number 7, Jack.

The confines of my mind...

More like outside the lines,

More like undefined,

More like it’s…,

I’m fine.

Welcome to my high!

Love blows me away

I’m afraid

Please say it’s okay…

Does she still love me?

Can she still find me?

My chest is glowing!

I’m holding,

A snowing for she.

Come melt me!

Reviews

[Nadia B.]

Your third stanza is a masterpiece to read! This poem is golden, it has the melancholy feel, satirical flair, the sad yet hopeful, a passionate end and circular read that ties in with your concept of infinity. I could read this over and over again, the word selection and sentence structure is eloquent and well decided upon. You have a masterful talent. Please never stop writing, and thank you for sharing such artistic beauty!

[sinNsincerity]

That means the world to me and I'm left speechless...
Thank you Nadia!

[Krystal Jones]

Nicely done, and without putting a lot of uneccesary frills on it. I think this piece is relatable, I think that everyone has felt this way at some point in time.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Krystal!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

An unusual love poem, indeed a building up of feelings and desires. I liked it very much. :) Rudi

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Rudi!

[Double T]

I like this poem. It's written so great.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad you like it!

[E G TEN]

Hey Sin, number 7 Jack it is ! You my friend is a modern day
Casanova. :-) I've read a few of your poems such as this, although similar in format, each one is an island of their own. Outstanding piece as always. Thanks for sharing! :-)

[sinNsincerity]

casanova
A smooth-talking charmer who has mastered the art of finding, meeting, attracting and seducing beautiful women into the bedroom. One he accomplishes his goal, he leaves the woman in fear of having a relationship and proceeds to find his next conquest.

Sounds like my old self lol
Thank you for reading brother!

[Yanina McKnight]

The chaotic elements one undergoes in their own mind are very well represented in this piece. "I’m afraid" Everyone in their own way or another is afraid, whether it be emotions or physical moments in time. Vulnerability can take a great toll on our lives, we are afraid of letting go, we are afraid of lose, we are afraid of the intangible, we are afraid of fear. We obtain different potions to sustain our thoughts and mind just like these phrases describe "More like a nightcap/Mr. bottle caps/Number 7, Jack./ The confines of my mind..."
This poem is very powerful if one takes the time to read and understand the meaning between the lines.
Great job!

-Yanina

[sinNsincerity]

Very vulnerable and gullible if I may add...
I'm am more than happy Yanina that you did take the time to not only read, but find the meaning between the lines.
I am always saying much more than the words that are being written, so I really do appreciate you taking notice of that!

[Yanina McKnight]

Yes I agree gullible as well. Writing is about finding meaning beneath the words one writes and reads, its a mini adventure with out images. I always try to find deeper messages in writing.

[micky]

Your best by far
I love this piece :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Micky!
It means so much for you to think so! =D

[Stephen]

I really nice write. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Thanks for sharing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Stephen. Always appreciated!

[sereenaoutloud]

This write is a glimpse into all those thoughts that are running though your mind (at least thats my take on it) Little stanzas representing each one as you capture it!!
Infinity ...if we are infinite then does that make everything all one time? no ending no beginning ?
Your minds is for sure undefined and keeps pushing outside the box...
Love and all it does to you... "come melt me " such a beautiful last line that makes a strong impact. The way i read it , it made me want to add ...'If you dare" lol
Sorry i rambled on Bestie...just love this! :)

[sinNsincerity]

No need for sorry's bestie =D
I always love hearing what you think!
I don't know lol I do believe in a begging, end and the in between as all one time.
Love is a killer for me haha sometimes I wish it would just all go away, but that's crazy. Love is what drives me.
I wrote it in one of my poems, "Love is the only reason for believing because I believe love was the very reason for my creation," or something like that. Pretty much I hold onto love because I believe my parents really did love each other when I was conceived.

[sereenaoutloud]

Sometimes my mind is weird lol
That is great way of looking at it , to believe in love for it was the reason for your creation.
Love is so many things, love, respect, trust, loyalty, friendship ...the list goes on and on and it can be overwhelming sometimes and when it goes wrong it can be devastating ..but yes i believe it is the reason we all keep going and have faith and hope!!

[sinNsincerity]

We are all weird and that's what makes us special.
The list does go on and is infinite.
read moreWe are all weird and that's what makes us special.
The list does go on and is infinite.
Enough is never enough...
I agree with you so much Sereena!

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I love this! Now all you got to do is PLAY IT OUT, and see if all that snow melts! Rehearsals over :)

[sinNsincerity]

You are too funny Lynn! =D
Thank you.

[Rana]

Interesting indeed, it did have this thing that made it sound like a ramble as if the poet were actually high, you know like how you've made the theme shift from one thing to the other, maybe it was even to show how so much goes in the brain since the confines of the mind is undefined, infinity. And when you end up like snowing snow ready to melt, that was a great imagery to conclude. Nice!