Deleted Scenes

In every 'while of uncertainty, 

I've walked outside of my mind like a dead man’s soul 

Does to his expressionless body.

This is my new found hobby.

I’m no longer left sobbing; 

I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby.

Reviews

[Alice Poésy]

In so few words you managed to explain that state of "numbness" a lot of people can't describe - and I myself can I identify with this poem frequently.

I also loved how you called this "Deleted Scenes"; the scenes that happened, but aren't seen by the public eye, just as this 'state' in the poem, normally goes unnoticed/unseen by those around us.

"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." That last line is a killer.

Fantastic job. Round of applause for you!

[sinNsincerity]

The life of an outcast who love to be left alone...and travels from within hehe
Thank so much Alice, I highly enjoy your analysis and what makes it relatable to you.
-David.

[Chelsea Lavender]

Its crazy to me how you have managed to write somethig so beautiful and emotional in such a few words! Envious of that! Loved it! Keep writing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for that, I highly appreciate that.
It takes a lot of deep thought for me to use less words, especially when I just want to spill it all. hehe Thank you once again!

[Kathryn Desautels]

When i first opened it up, seemed like it would be dull. But after i read it, wow! Short, but full of emotion.

[sinNsincerity]

Ahaa
Thank you Kathryn!

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot said in the short poem.
"I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby."
The forbidden lobby left the reader with questions. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you.
the lobby is my mind itself...

[Coyote Poetry]

I got it now and you are welcome.

[Susana Puente]

Wow great to know you give a piece of ur forbidden lobby,and to my opinión is full of intreging benefits!

Love it !little but spicey!

[sinNsincerity]

Everyone is welcome...if they dare...

[Angela Sparks]

Not very long, that was my first thought. But as I read it, every word, everysentence had more then enough meaning packed in it that it didn't need to be overbearing or long. The words you chose were brilliant, the structure and feeling both are very good. I love this piece. Thank you for sharing:)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Angela, I feel like my writing was really at a good place when it was done, so I really appreciate that.

[Lucifer, The Royal King..]

You have a gift for putting a lot of meaning into so few words. This is something I can only imagine to have. Good job, I love it. Full rating from me.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Silver for thinking so, and you could as well.
My writing is no where close to where I want it to be and it will never be...
It's a high and love that I'll be chasing my entire life.
I just keep working on it it as well as myself and never force the words to come out, so that they can speak for themselves.

[Lucifer, The Royal King Of Hell]

That is really cool. I never thought about that. Though, for me, words just show up whenever I'm really upset.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

seems very deep, like it has such meaning behind it, very poetic soulful piece.
Its a shame I don't understand the meaning behind it haha.
Keep writing :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you. I wrote this about how, in my opinion, it is important for me to get out of myself and lose myself...

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

hmm that's pretty deep. I was right it was very meaningful :)

[Emily]

Great wording!!
I loved it!
Keep on writing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily!

[Southern_Writes]

Interesting, very short but so long at the same time. Nice.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[Celie Rose]

I like your poem. Short but meaningful. "I'm just a wanderer in a forbidden lobby." I get a sense of a lost soul trying to find it's way. Nicely written. Keep writing.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Celie. It's more about my soul enjoying being lost and being out and about. Something that use to frighten me has now become a pleasure...