Who's this?

Ring…

Hello?

She replied,

“It’s destiny.”

Is this faith?

Is this meant to be..?

“No!,

Don’t be stupid silly.

My name is Destiny.”

Oh, pardon me

For reacting so selfishly.

She speaks about

All of my problems

And insecurities.

Lip service!

Shaking up my thoughts.

It’s turbulence!

My over reaction

Is her favorite fetish.

“What’s your problem?

You need help!

Just forget it.”

The longer you stay with me

The more you’ll regret it.

I’m reckless!

Looking for another

Emotions get her super jealous.

Clock work…

What time is it?

Eleven past seven.

Smile so bright

It raises her height.

Losing the weight

Of madness...

Trimming it down

With wet lettuce.

The potholes on the

Surface of my bones

Run deep into my soul.

I could never reach

Her with my hands,

And that’s why she can’t ever

Let me go...

Reviews

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow..
An extraordinary piece of work. It kept me completely engrossed from the first letter till the last.
I loved this whirlpool of emotions portrayed in so few words.
Amazingly surreal. End is a bit sad but life is all about these feelings, right?
Love can be hell of a force to handle sometimes, isn't it?
Happy I came across this! Enjoyed it!

[sinNsincerity]

I've very glad that you think so Jyoti!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Me too. Good day.

[WritersBlock101]

Can someone explain this poem to me? I feel lost.

[sinNsincerity]

What don't you understand about it?

[Melinda McQueen]

Loved this one. Many can relate. We have many expectations , yet all we want is to love and be loved.

[sinNsincerity]

Very much so!
Thank you so much!

[Lizardo]

Wow, this poem is really touching.
I like how you divided the poem for the conversation.
Great style of writing you have a good style.
Great poem.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[TheOne&Only]

Loved the structure of this poem!!! Interesting. Great write as always!! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you! I'm happy that you loved it.
Thank you for reading!

[MrsBear]

I really dig this poem. I think we can all relate since we all have that voice in our head that says we nedd to be better and we try to work up to those expectations when in the end, we just have to accept ourselves for who we are. I can also relate well to the "loose the weight" line since I have struggled with anorexia and bulimia in the past but have since overcame it. I can't write poetry but I love reading poetry that can express what I'm feeling and relate to my life in some way. That's what helps me get through sometimes. (:

[sinNsincerity]

Well I'm ecstatic that you enjoyed and could find something in it.
I guess we place expectations upon ourselves to better oneself...
The vision of greatness that we want to reach, but what happens once we reach it or don't..?
Life is a beautiful mystery and I welcome the journey.

[ANTO]

This is one of the most experimental and very successful writes I've read on here Sin.
It sounds as if the narrator has destiny all figured out - oh if only.
Great wit exhibited here too my friend. Class

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sir Anto!
Just a tad figured out until she decides to switch things up for her amusement...
It's always a pleasure to hear from you my dear friend!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I really dig this! My favorite line is
My over reaction
Is her favorite fetish.

just wow.
I had to read it twice to fully get what it was about. But i liked that about it. I think to each person it could mean some mean something else.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you enjoyed those lines!
Thank you so much for reading Cystal.
Many meanings indeed and they can change with the way we feel at different times...

[Leindor]

I really loved this. As I was reading, Destiny's voice became more sultry in my mind. I really liked this! I think this might be my favorite.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Brittany! That means the word to me.
I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thank you once again!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Dear friend, an interesting format. One voice here. Another there. Destiny speaking sometimes. You always bring something new in your experimentation with words. Keep at it!

[sinNsincerity]

You read it so well! That was my intention... to have one voice come in and then an other...
Thank you for reading Nadia! It's always a pleasure to hear from you!

[yvo miki]

this is so appeling to the eye I love it

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you do!
Thank you for reading Yvo!

[yvo miki]

ur welcome