Ninth Grade

Started writing poetry in ninth grade;

Got played by this girl named Nancy,

But it was okay

Because she never said she

Loved me,

So I never held a grudge against she.

I still went to the dollar show at the Avalon

To watch Blink 182;

Although,

I felt as if I were

Standing in the House of Blues…

At the same time,

Having oral sex was just

A fantasy,

Better yet… wet dreams.

Exclusively,

I live the street dreams

Because a lot of people

Killed my reality.

I said f**k school and didn’t give two s***s about a salary

Because all I needed at that moment

Was a HUG.

I had a heavy heart that barely

Stayed, but it took long walks in the park.

Sounds of judgment in my head filled me with insecurities,

But one day in fifth period,

English class,

She took away my skateboard from underneath my feet and asked,

“Hey Sweetie,

What are you listening to in your CD Player?”

I replied, “Yellowcard’s ‘Ocean Ave.’”

She struck back and said,

“Well,

You’re pretty cute and you seem like

my kind of dude.

I’ve been eyeing you from the very first day of school.

My name is Mayra

and I’m sorry that last girl

put out your fire,

but it’ll be alright because Imma take

you higher!”

Then she kissed me...

Her mood ring turned green.

Who would of known it would have blown up

Bigger than just being two horny freaks?

We both started catching feelings

And before we both knew it…

The bell rang.

Reviews

[JayceeC]

I love that you included some signs of the times...although I think mood rings were more an age thing than a time thing, but skateboards, mood rings, Yellowcard, they give this a period feel that makes it a good nostalgia piece.
"so I never held a grudge against she." please fix this to "her" or just "so I never held a grudge." the she is implied. The improperness of that line just hangs for me.
jan

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Jan, always appreciated! =D

[PaintedBirdy]

haha! i love this! where do i begin!?

i like the line "so i never held a grudge against she"
that's my favorite line in this. i get it. and i love it. from reading the other reviews i don't think people get the dialect of it, therefore they don't get the meaning of it. or maybe i'm wrong too, i don't know!

i've never been to the avalon (wouldn't be surprised if i drove past it a dozen times or more) but i get the same feeling from some of the venues i've been to. don't hate me, haha, i spent most my life in central california (sf, the bay, sacramento, tahoe, yosemite; i don't call california home any longer though, spent too much time away).

overall, i love how real this poem feels. most of your poetry that i've read so far has this similar feel. it's amazing. more than anything, it's authentic. i could definitely learn from you! haha. highest compliments!

[sinNsincerity]

My goodness, this is a throwback! Thank you MondineGarcon, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I still don't hold a grudge against her, or any women I've have given my heart to...
They all have taught me to be a better person, and the joy was worth the misery I must say.
The dialect is key and it's alright if people don't understand the essence of it because they didn't grow up in East Los Angeles with me and share those experiences, but I'm sure others might or have lived through similar situations. I've been taking my writing to a whole other dimension, which makes it hard to pick apart, but is possible with the acquired knowledge...
Yea, small venues are the best! And not to worry, I wouldn't hate you. Now, the SF Giants is an other story hehe
Thank you once again, I do my best to be as real as I can be. I have to be brutally honest with myself and undress myself with full exposure, so that I may tap into the voice of the certain moments in my life. Just have to say f**k it!

[Ana B.]

Oh this was wonderful! I am sorry i am not as often as before on this site, certainly my loss. But with every work of your that i read i repeat - i am a fan.

[sinNsincerity]

No need for sorry's, I have not been on as much as well, so I understand.
I admire you writing as well, so that means so much. Thank you Ana!

[Willard Wells]

JC covered my concern, but those are small in the scope of this great piece. Lots of fun and smiles within this and you cannot ask for more. Nice.

[sinNsincerity]

oh yea, I love Jan and always appreciate her insight.
Thank you Willard.

[Coyote Poetry]

Avery nice story shared in the poetry,
"We both started catching feelings
And before we both knew it…
The bell rang."
Ninth grade, poetry and kiss. A good day. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sinNsincerity]

And it's not even the half of it hehe
Thank you so much for reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[sinNsincerity]

As well as mine.

[prachi prangya agasti]

The lines definitely have a flow and that's what enhances its innocence and sweetness.

[sinNsincerity]

And that innocence and sweetness is something I'll never let go.
Thank you so much for spending the time to read!

[Tag_YoureDead]

This is really sweet. It makes it very good. I love reading things like this, because they always flow.
Keep it up :)

~Mystique

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you hon, I'm always trying new ways to stimulate and to bring pleasure to the readers mind.

[Tag_YoureDead]

This is a really good way to do it and it works! Thank you for sharing it with us

[alf]

I have so very much missed the rawness of your writes, my friend!!! Great poem!! Love the flow!!!

[sinNsincerity]

That means so much to me Alf.
Thank you so much!

[alf]

Really great write.... extremely poetic!!

[Stan Lee]

"Because all i needed at that moment, was a HUG" Yep, know that feeling. Raw writing. Thanks for sharing.

[sinNsincerity]

That has to be one of my fav. parts.
Thank you!

[P.J. Amey]

That sums up 9th grade for a dude pretty damn well.
You also seem in and around my age, so this is quite accurate for the era to me. I may have been in 7th or 8th depending.

Good work as usual

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much P.J.
So glad that you could relate!

[Emily]

Love it!
One of my new favorites of yours!
Love the ending!!
Keep on writing!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Emily!