You really write great beat poetry..I wants to be read allowed. The rhythm pulls me through even when there's a line that I want to question, and so it deserves another read. On second read I started really looking at the contradictions. . Decay and harpooning are hallmarks of somrthing dying, but as I read on it was clearly not the intent. Then the crime..made me think..why? Why is it a crime? Byond that I enjoyed the tumble of metaphors you used to build this. Only dicover should be discovered. Your creativity is to be commended.
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9 Years Ago
Nice, my goal was to give that rhythm and beat, so that is would be a pleasure to read and do exactl.. read moreNice, my goal was to give that rhythm and beat, so that is would be a pleasure to read and do exactly what you said: to pull you in. The love is a crime because it differs from the ordinary norm Love. That why in the end I say when it is discovered it would have to be studied...
Thank you for reading Jaycee!
This is beautiful. I agree with an earlier comment. This piece begs to be read out loud. You are really talented. I enjoy your work very much!
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9 Years Ago
Thank you Whitney, I work really hard at it.
I really appreciate you spending the time to rea.. read moreThank you Whitney, I work really hard at it.
I really appreciate you spending the time to read and leave me your thoughts.
A amazing poem. The words danced with the energy of hope and hope.
"Some will say our love is a crime,
But I don’t mind
Because
I love you"
I like the many good statements in the poetry. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
speedly read... for sure it has more than when you slowly try to understand évery nuance or whateva...
Wordplay... contradicting meanings to your end making them yours..
One can try to understand but thought comes deeper when orientated to it... and then meanings can be many and more... and any way you look at it other's see something else..
*nodding*
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9 Years Ago
Yea, this one is one of my favorites because I used a lot of my literary and writing skill right her.. read moreYea, this one is one of my favorites because I used a lot of my literary and writing skill right here.
All about just one weekend in Vegas.
I always try to right indifferent ways and the way I do that is by writing in the moment, or else it'll be gone as a distant memory...
It's always going to be hard to understand and the readers will never truly know the whole story, so it's always good for the reader to take from it what they want, or at least I do.
Thank you for reading Midsummers, I really appreciate it.
9 Years Ago
Well.. i try to be honest in my way... it's not always so clear and more like rambling it is to me.... read moreWell.. i try to be honest in my way... it's not always so clear and more like rambling it is to me.. bt as one said to me today...
One has to follow his/her... "coordinator" as like this saying:
You must follow your muse as you hear her.
Which by the way made me thought something which i have to add as well as a opener to my way of thought... mindset and so on..:D maybe... it will tell something... to some.
But one has to do what one feels to be right at that moent.. some are just irrational at that moment but be rational or insight to innerwold of one self... or to the moment or... whatever it has been to arouse that writing of which...
Hard is to understand stuff but it is the journey to one's mind to the one which isn't exposed but by going deeper than one otherwise can... there's wisdom and something which tell something more of the situation or the feeling.. or gives the key undertand in time due.. what it has been which...
And so on..
Hope you would reviev or saw through some of these rmablings of mine tho they aren't like those thoughts or mindset to understand... but as the definiton goes as the short analyze which tells the core and told me it wasn't such rambling.. but disjointed stuff...:D (and the english is me in the whole... as my thought goes..:P)
I shalöl try to read those popoems of yours but do invite to read them.. in order you feel is worth the time.. in that moment, okay?
This gives me a feeling that I cant even explain its like a familiar feeling but then again its like one that you lust for. I'm in love with it !
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9 Years Ago
That's amazing and exactly why I love to write. I'm happy that it made you feel that way.
Tha.. read moreThat's amazing and exactly why I love to write. I'm happy that it made you feel that way.
Thank you for reading!