Vdara

Shivery, lust, and bad attitudes...

Were all on the menu

Yester-moon.

It was rather a great late afternoon…

Your lipstick shade decayed the day

Along with harpooning the mood.

And we shared stage frights

Until the stars met our eyes.

Oh my,

           The kiss you left on my chest was bliss!

No, it was much more Ms.

I savored every inch of it

Knowing it wouldn’t remain,

But to me…

It was sacred.

It was painless.

It was the perfect silence.

And “it”

Wasn’t afraid to welcome in the rain ---

It said , “chime in.”

It was a perfect harmony like a wind chime

When our souls met.

Some will say our love is a crime,

But I don’t mind.

Because

                     I love you.

And you..?

Hummingbird

Nectar,

The reason why my neck hurts!

That’s magical like

The Mayan temples,

And when

They re...discover

This Love,

It will uncover a new

Category list

Of philosopher.

Reviews

[JayceeC]

You really write great beat poetry..I wants to be read allowed. The rhythm pulls me through even when there's a line that I want to question, and so it deserves another read. On second read I started really looking at the contradictions. . Decay and harpooning are hallmarks of somrthing dying, but as I read on it was clearly not the intent. Then the crime..made me think..why? Why is it a crime? Byond that I enjoyed the tumble of metaphors you used to build this. Only dicover should be discovered. Your creativity is to be commended.

[sinNsincerity]

Nice, my goal was to give that rhythm and beat, so that is would be a pleasure to read and do exactly what you said: to pull you in. The love is a crime because it differs from the ordinary norm Love. That why in the end I say when it is discovered it would have to be studied...
Thank you for reading Jaycee!

[Harley Quinn]

I liked it very much. Thanks for sharing. Great work.

[nikki.s.]

I could feel the rhythm. the word choice really makes you stop and reread. I really like it and I think I read this many more times and find something new.

[EcstaticEuphoria]

Beautiful use of words and imagery. I like that this one is done very creativity and uniquely, definitely liked reading it a couple times to take it all in.

[rowan.taylorrr]

this is great! I felt every word of this piece, well done!!

[Einstein Noodle]

unique and creative ..contrasting beginnings and endings are strong and brings home the positive for me ... i particularly love this line:
"No, it was much more Ms. " i guess it seems to be the turn in your poem ... and i like your closing ..as temples from antiquity are uncovered ..a new Category of philosopher indeed! very enjoyable read
E.
ps. had to google Vdara ... i don't get out much ;)

[Nora]

Pretty good poem, I love it

[rachellynn]

Beautiful piece. I enjoyed most the flow of the poem and the imagery your words conveyed. Wonderful job.

[KT-B]

I enjoyed this, flows so well, enchanting read - great stuff :)

[Tabby Mac]

Now I LOVE this one! I stayed in a hotel called VDARA in Vegas and the title put me in the right state of mind for the words that followed!
I'm all about a rhyme, so this tickled me! Love the flow and the story it creates! Is this revised from another of your pieces? It felt familiar to me...I love how all the dots connected here! Just enough to fill in the gaps with your mind! Sexy, but tasteful! Claps
Tabby

[Deana Leigh]

This was really cool! It kind of reminded me of a Panic at the Disco song. I really liked the section about the hummingbird. Great idea!