Hold Your Ticket

Everything is very unique…

Quote my behavior.

Factual relationships,

Not living in the past,

So I can live in the now.

Sorry about that,

But I had to dig back,

To let you know that the first will be last…

I’m coming into my own,

But I do know…

That I do not own my soul.

Am I saved by my works or by my faith?

I said sorry once,

So let’s turn the page...

I’m taking back Sunday

And saying f**k you to three days of grace

Because there are days when I don’t want to obey.

I’m a living, walking, talking contradiction;

More like Yin-Yang.

I guess I have to say it again,

And again,

I’m SORRY God,

But I don’t want to be the same.

Being perfect by just knowing I am flesh,

And I’m always knowing love can be refreshed.

Taking care,

But most times I’m caring towards temptation.

Don’t try to understand the essence of what is being said,

Just accept it.

Not one can be inducted into the hall of fame of the holy gates

And that’s okay because I’m satisfied with this Earthly place.

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.

I love being the crack in the wall.

Acknowledge the choreographer.

A love gift.

To go away with this is more than a message…

Hold your ticket!

Reviews

[steven sundell]

I love reading passion that bleeds from thoughts, obviously written, as most true art, be it in lyric form, stage playwright, book, chapters, or verse, without need of anything contrived. That which WILL remain within or without are the 3 following stanzas,

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.
I love being the crack in the wall.
Acknowledge the choreographer!

Great effort!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading, I really appreciate it!

[E G TEN]

Holding my ticket bro" ~No one can be inducted to the hall of fame of holy gates,
And thats ok cause im satisfied with this Earthly Place"~ by Sin In Sincerity Classic line my friend
Very well written and nicely done, Thanks for Sharing! :-)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much

[sereenaoutloud]

Yep i agree with JayceeC this has a beat to it and is an awesome piece. So true no one is perfect we all make mistakes and have personal battles after all we are only human!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sereena

[A.C. Lei]

The way you put the words is just pure intense. Reading it is like a ride of bursting emotions set in a rhythmic trance that makes me want to read it over and over. It's refutation. Contradiction against perfection. It is existence. A truth of humanity.

Great job!

[sinNsincerity]

It was very intense when I was writing this. Firstly I just wanted to get it off my chest, secondly, I had to read it over and write over a few times because I wanted to provoke and push some peoples buttons, so they can really admit that it's not wrong of me to feel this way. Like you said, it is existent, so we need, well at least me, have to stop trying to be perfect and just be me.

[nazia]

Well well well, An interesting read David and more than the work I like the title you gave it.. It really made me curious. Like the way you expressed your emotions. Brilliant :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nazia. I wanted to write this to show that, "Hey, I'm not perfect." And although my faith in God is strong, my selfish side is always going to want what it desires and I don't mind caring for those desire at times. I know I'm not a bad person and have a good heart, but sometimes I don't want to be.

[nazia]

No one is perfect David. We all yield to our desires at times but what matters is you keep your sanity alive and avoid hurting other people. And I am sure you take care of those things :)

[sinNsincerity]

I take care of them very well =D

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Before I say anything else, I did find two errors, so here are the corrections:
- Don’t "waste" your time because we are all flawed.
- Hold "your" ticket.

If it were up to God and not for spiritual books written and institutionalized by people, He would understand that we are only humans and we do make mistakes. We can never be perfect all the time (or ever), but we do our best to strive to be good and what is goodness in our hearts as opposed to what is written and dictated in books. Amen for keeping faith, but acknowledging that you are HUMAN.

[sinNsincerity]

'Kay, just fixed them. Thank you for bringing those forward!
Yes, exactly.
This sis why I don't mind writing my wrongs and this is only possible because I have made my peace with him.

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Wonderful my friend! I am glad! :)

[TheOne&Only]

It reminds me of the fight between what a person is to whom they want to be or who they need to be. Very interesting. A battle I go through once in awhile. "..Hold Your Ticket..."...very nice!!

[sinNsincerity]

Yea you pretty much summed it up right there =D
Thank you for reading love!

[JayceeC]

So Beat poetry?
This piece feels the the lyrics to a piece of Christian Rap Music (Tedashii, or Lecrae)/ It starts out and then picks up speed. It's like getting on a roller coaster. Although some of your words seem to contradict your faith, in the same breath your saying that it it's okay because of Grace and you are forgiven. You expressed yourself and your position with some style. These two lines said it all for you:

Being perfect by just knowing I am flesh,
And I’m always knowing love can be refreshed. Genesis 1:26 & Deuteronomy 31:6 allusions

It's very interesting and perhaps would seem different to one who did not read closely, or who had not read of faith in your other works. but not to this reader. Keep the Faith!
~Jan

[sinNsincerity]

Oh Lord, I will never try to rap hahaha Too hard! I intended to contradict myself because truly that's what life is, a contradiction. We are born and then we die. As above, so below... I said it in the poem that I, myself, am a contradiction. =D I'm glad that you noticed that I borrowed those quotes from the bible.
Thank you for spending the time to read and leave such a great review Jay!
Always appreciated

[JayceeC]

You are quite welcome, and just because you don't strive to do something does not me and you cannot do it..LOL Okay my tongue doesn't move fast enough for rap either, but does that mean we cant write it?

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work my friend! Emotion filled poem... loved it!

[sinNsincerity]

Thanks for reading Bro!

[Einahpets2012]

Breath taking, i'm speechless this is so full of emotion as all your poems are :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you love! Always a pleasure to know you enjoy reading them!

[wordman]

Dam ,you poured it all out my friend hold your ticket the first is last
being in the desert is a lonely place

[sinNsincerity]

It's may sound cruel, but I only know how to be brutally honest with myself, so I can shed that part of me off.
Thank you for reading Sir!

[wordman]

you are welcome