Hold Your Ticket

Everything is very unique…

Quote my behavior.

Factual relationships,

Not living in the past,

So I can live in the now.

Sorry about that,

But I had to dig back,

To let you know that the first will be last…

I’m coming into my own,

But I do know…

That I do not own my soul.

Am I saved by my works or by my faith?

I said sorry once,

So let’s turn the page...

I’m taking back Sunday

And saying f**k you to three days of grace

Because there are days when I don’t want to obey.

I’m a living, walking, talking contradiction;

More like Yin-Yang.

I guess I have to say it again,

And again,

I’m SORRY God,

But I don’t want to be the same.

Being perfect by just knowing I am flesh,

And I’m always knowing love can be refreshed.

Taking care,

But most times I’m caring towards temptation.

Don’t try to understand the essence of what is being said,

Just accept it.

Not one can be inducted into the hall of fame of the holy gates

And that’s okay because I’m satisfied with this Earthly place.

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.

I love being the crack in the wall.

Acknowledge the choreographer.

A love gift.

To go away with this is more than a message…

Hold your ticket!

Reviews

[steven sundell]

I love reading passion that bleeds from thoughts, obviously written, as most true art, be it in lyric form, stage playwright, book, chapters, or verse, without need of anything contrived. That which WILL remain within or without are the 3 following stanzas,

Don’t waste your time because we are all flawed.
I love being the crack in the wall.
Acknowledge the choreographer!

Great effort!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading, I really appreciate it!

[OhSnapShley]

A great read, from an obviously great writer. Thanks for sharing this passion filled poetry with us. Great job.

[prachi prangya agasti]

Nice work. I loved reading it. You have wonderfully portrayed your pent up emotions...

[Asya Kardzhaliyska]

This is a wonderful piece of poetry, and I loved reading it! You can really feel the anger and emotions that drive the piece forward, keep up the good work!

[Carissa England]

This is amazing! I love how easily you can see the thought and emotion put into the writing.

[Jessica Lima]

Flows like a song. I like the structure of the body also. keep it up. :)

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, very cool read. It's nice to be lead, where we can just follow an explosion of thoughts. Writing full of passion and conviction. Izzy

[Maple Ellen]

I always get so warm and fluffy when I read your work!

[BBP]

Rad write! Hold your ticket!

People are afraid to admit it but they struggle with it on a daily.

Is being so cautious with your actions just a false prelim to a test we all eventually will fail anyways?

Really dig this one Sin! Nice job.

[Poetic License]

ABSOLUTELY I can identify with this poem - every single line! Especially this one: "I love being the crack in the wall." Your contradictions are superb! You caught me right away, threw me off guard and then slapped me to my senses. Every time I made assumptions about how this was going, you upended me...with more contradiction.

I adore this!!!! I love how you kept me engaged and on my toes. By the end, I was reading to learn, to discover - no more assumptions. Truly an amazing endeavor.

"Don’t try to understand the essence of what is being said,

Just accept it."

You nailed it my friend. BRAVO!

[Mel Jayne]

Nice poem. It really is quit clear and to the point. I was a bit confused by the grammar at the very start but that wasn't a problem anywhere else in the poem. I think that you have done an amazing job capturing thoughts in a poetic way. I think that this piece has the potential to be a very powerful spoken word poem. Might be interesting to see how it fairs on youtube haha. Keep up the deep writing.