Dandelions

Dandelions

I’m too obsessed,

So I bite my tongue

Because it may lead into

The depths of  hopelessness.

It’s easy to assist,

But I’m too intimate to

Just be friends.

Of course we can be,

But that’ll be my death

sentence.

I want you to

have it all.

Not just a piece of me.

I want to create a Love

Dynasty that’ll leave you

delighted like lions rolling around

in dandelions.

Reviews

[ANTO]

It all or nothing with the narrator here. No half-measures. It an intensity that could scare all but the most determined so that makes the search even harder - the options are much narrower for hearts that want to fall quickly and wholly into love. The romanticised notion of 'The One' is probably at work here. Believeing in movies and songs and yes even poems help set us up for the great disappointment
The final lasting image of the lions is wonderful, Sin.
Good write my friend.
:))

[sinNsincerity]

Haha toche' Anto. Thank you for reading and leaving a note sir!

[ANTO]

You're welcome Sin. :)

[CherryEllie]

I really like it. Especially:

But I’m too intimate to
Just be friends.
Of course we can be,
But that’ll be my death
sentence.

I felt like I could relate to that. It's amazing. Keep it up.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad you came across this one. It's one of my favorites that I have created.

[EcstaticEuphoria]

"Like lions rolling around
in dandelions" so great! Loved this piece, no surprise there😉 thanks for sharing!

[Einstein Noodle]

so relateable ...anyone on that "love road" has this experience ..i agree completely .."we can not be friends" ;( great title and marvelous closing lines ..i love the lions and dandelions ..such a vivid image they are ...as fierce as lions can be they do roll and play in the tall grasses of the Serengeti ... (not that i have been there physically) when dandelions replace the grass it is a delightful scene ...very much enjoyed this rather heart wrenching poem ... nice job says i!
E.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

images are lasting and telling
inside the words here.
Nice metaphors with built-in
structures to captivate on.

[Jessica Lima]

It is kinda scary to give oneself fully. Thinking about it makes me cringe. If one is rejected... the whole self is worth... less than nothing. But it was beautifully written as always.

[Brittany Bostic]

I liked how this poem seemed to flow and then jump. The end two lines are my favorite. Very nice!

[Nora]

Great one , l felt like l read a lyrics of song while i was reading it 😊

[Carissa England]

I'm in love with the use of syntax in this poem! It really helps with the imagery :)

[Mr.Writer]

The way this is written lets the reader easily understand what's going on and. I really enjoyed reading this :)
Keep it up!

[Raj Sahu]

A good writing indeed. Thanks for sharing. 😊