My Eyes

My Eyes

Looking up at the starry sky,

     I see the beauty in its eyes,

To only notice that they are gazing down upon mine.

         To notice that there is no time,

Not a time that is mine.

To notice space is within my side of all of the night.

To notice that I don’t need a beacon of light to travel to the space by your side.

To notice that I can’t deny the sight of light that lurks in the mist of night.

I should have really known that there’s really no control of the lies that lay beneath your eyes.

The pain that lays beside the sighs will not be my demise.

Oh how I try,

But there’s no other way to go than write.

The left is always blind to the right.

The dark is always blind to the light.

The pain is always blind with feeling alright.

I am always blind to your eyes,

So I will always have the starry moon light

                        To look through the skies eyes...

Reviews

[Elisa]

I love the dichotomies of darkness to light, blindness to sight, and pain to feeling alright. This is such a captivating poem. Correct me if I'm wrong, but at the end, are you talking about looking at life (and more specifically, the one whom you love who has hurt you) through heaven's eyes instead of your own? If that's the case, the question that arises is: what new revelations come to a person when they see through heaven's eyes? Perhaps we acquire the capacity to forgive, or maybe the wisdom to see that we have to move on. Either way, there are so many levels to this poem, and so many compelling questions that it elicits. Nice job!

[sinNsincerity]

Wow, get out of my head!
On a serious note,
yes, very much so. Indeed it is about someone I long for and
exactly how you said it...
I had to experience some things to acquire the wisdom to find different perspectives,
so that I could move on, accept, and forgive.
And this has allowed me to still have an open heart no matter the possible hurt that may follow.
Again, I really love how dead on you were with this one.
Thank you so much for reading Elisa.

T.C.C.I.C

[Elisa]

No problem. I really enjoyed this :)

[nazia]

This is a captivating yet an easy flowing piece David. To write something so intricate yet maintain the balance of simplicity is a tough job and you did that well. Great job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Nazia! It's my pleasure.

[sereenaoutloud]

Love this, another great piece Sweet sin. i especially liked "The pain that lays beside the sighs will not be my demise" Nicely said and again the rhythm and rhyme superb!

[sinNsincerity]

Awe! Thank you Sereena! I highly appreciate it and yes, that line holds so much value to me. =D

[Melinda McQueen]

I enjoyed this. It has an ease to it that captivates.
A lovely write. Thanks for sharing.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Melinda. You're a sweet heart =D

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome piece my friend... very good work... always a pleasure reading your writings :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Aaron, It's always a pleasure to hear what you think! =D
Have a great day!

[wordman]

buddy you did a great job on this write
did you know the whole bible is in the stars

[sinNsincerity]

Yes sir, thank you sir! Glad you liked it sir! =D

[wordman]

you are welcome,sir