I liked the description of life and journey.
"I give my good wishes to my home I have yet to find.
In due time you will be mine,
But for now I have my only two best friends:
The paper and pen."
The above lines stood out and needed goal and place to know. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
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My two friends and tools to help document the journey...
Thank you so much for reading, I'm r.. read moreMy two friends and tools to help document the journey...
Thank you so much for reading, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
I liked the description of life and journey.
"I give my good wishes to my home I have yet to find.
In due time you will be mine,
But for now I have my only two best friends:
The paper and pen."
The above lines stood out and needed goal and place to know. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
My two friends and tools to help document the journey...
Thank you so much for reading, I'm r.. read moreMy two friends and tools to help document the journey...
Thank you so much for reading, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
This is so powerful .... Poets write to comfort their souls when love is missing, honestly this is how i feel right now, composing poetry appears to fill the gap that love creates when is missing.
Thank you for sharing this
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9 Years Ago
It surly does fill the gap and you're not alone there. Not too sure where I would be without poetry... read moreIt surly does fill the gap and you're not alone there. Not too sure where I would be without poetry...
Thank you so much for reading!
The only thing to do is face hate with love
always
hold no grudges
let go of bitterness
and love anyways
no anger
the heart grows as big as the world
when acceptance kicks in
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And that was a very tough virtue to acquire, but one I'm most proud of.
I no longer hold grud.. read moreAnd that was a very tough virtue to acquire, but one I'm most proud of.
I no longer hold grudges towards anyone. It's wasted energy that could be focused elsewhere...
You know exactly what I'm talking about.
Thank you so much for reading!
This is profound, wise and honest. Pieces of writing that end optimistically after being about challenges and struggles are always a charm. 'Fury causes such tragedy'- so true and the realization of it is a sign one is strained and yearns for a calmer disposition, 'Acceptance will release the pain' -something mysteriously right, wonder how it works. Many great lines. Ambitiousness and patience are one of the best combinations ever.
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9 Years Ago
It is mysterious and strangely it works hehe
I usually try end such a tragic piece with hope .. read moreIt is mysterious and strangely it works hehe
I usually try end such a tragic piece with hope because the struggle does have a purpose and there's a purpose for the purpose.
Thank you for reading Rana. It is always such a pleasure to hear from you!
"I not require food or drink because love drives this body." for consideration "I do not require food or drink because love drives this body.". Struggles to survive and stay focused and honest even as you struggle for a place to sleep and call home. Paper and Pen sadly is more than many have. Nicely done.
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9 Years Ago
I purposely left out the "do."
And the paper and pen is all that I truly have.
Thank y.. read moreI purposely left out the "do."
And the paper and pen is all that I truly have.
Thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts Willard.
I highly appreciate it.
Nice poem, and really true sometimes we think we are getting free but realise that it's a prison. Poem is deeply thought and tells truth about life and dreams. Moreover your profile name also appears deeply thought " Sin In Sincerity".
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9 Years Ago
Why thank Divya! =D
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I didnt ynderstood ur comment.
9 Years Ago
I didnt understood ur comment
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sorry for butting in Divya my friend
the =D is a very happy eyes wide open smiley face
Words, the great companion of life...only we can shape our selves in such traumatic times...there is conviction and salvation threaded here, a way to cope and release :)
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Yep, God can only do so much and I've learned that the sufferer must save himself sometimes.
.. read moreYep, God can only do so much and I've learned that the sufferer must save himself sometimes.
Thank you so much for reading Ruth!
I love so much about this poem, I don't really know where to start.
The title shows depth of understanding that patience is a virtue; that good things come to those who wait and repeating the sentiment in the third last line helps tie the piece neatly together.
The shift from hate (realizing that it really is the only thing that destroys our freedom) to love and hopefulness, as the piece unfolds, gives us a glimpse into the kind of reflective person you are.
Your line, "But sight won’t bring back love ones", is so true: just because we see the error of our ways doesn't mean we will acquire all we have lost in the process. But, seeing our errors does lay the foundation for a new path; one built on patience, courage, love, and hope.
I also love the picture you have chosen as it reminds me the thinker, only this one is the 'tortured thinker" - such an apt image for the one you paint with your words.
Your final two lines take me back to "I Am A Rock" by Paul Simon in which his poetry becomes his protector, and really, who among us has not sought the comfort of our friends, pen and paper?
Perhaps the greatest thing about this write, however, is the way in which readers are able to connect to it for many of us can write a similar piece about making mistakes, losing people and being homeless.
Sorry to have taken up so much space this morning, but my friends said I had to respond and so thankful am I for pen and paper...
Great work, Sin and Sincerity
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Patience is most definitely a virtue and I have nurtured it along with plenty other virtues.
.. read morePatience is most definitely a virtue and I have nurtured it along with plenty other virtues.
I'm glad you took notice in the shift for it was a pivotal moment in my life. I was in an unhappy place and I needed to ask why and how this happened and then later ask how I can move on from that ache and better myself. I'm a very self-reflective person and I take it very serious.
"sigh won't bring back love ones," I've learned that the hard way, but surly as you stated, it does give sight towards a new path and I can only hope others can see that. If not..., I'm fine with that in a sense and certain degree because I want people to see the good. Not only in me, but in themselves...
That is a picture of Norrin Radd aka the Silver Surfer. I relate a ton with him and the philosophy.
I just took a listen and it's a very good song. And that's true, it used to be my protector, but now it's my surfboard hehe
No need for sorry's at all. I love and highly appreciate that you spent the time to read and leave me your thoughts!
Thank you.