Whiplash

When you look me in my eyes and see a shine,

It’s not a star,

Just all of the pain that I hold inside of my heart.

I’m indifferent,

So I remain different.

My inner beast is my sickness,

But I love this wickedness!

When I’m good I’m good and when I’m bad I’m bad,

But I do the best to be the best me.

I lost myself trying to find myself.

No distance,

I just don’t want to remain as a witness.

I can kick it like a cactus,

Always chill in the summer heat,

I’m the summer breeze.

We can go the distance; although, I do not intend to get you undress.

I’ll be me and you be you,

No need to impress,

I think way too much,

It’s far from a disease!

Everyone has left me down in the past,

So I only have God, music, and weed.

The future can bring new dreams into reality,

The only problem is that I never get any sleep!

I stay up countless hours just counting sheep.

Do sheep count sheep when they can’t sleep?

My thoughts are full of negativity,

But I acknowledge that this isn’t me.

Every now and then,

Life just doesn’t seem so right for me.

Call me weak,

My mind wants to leave,

My soul screams,

My outer body has suicidal tendencies.

I will never end it on my own,

So know when my soul expresses my pain through writings…

It’s not what I want,

But what I need.

Reviews

[Lucy]

I can relate to this a lot; a few of the rhymes were a stretch but the message came across. It's really hard honestly how you loose yourself when you try to find it, and being suck on yes and no. I think this poem has a lot of potential since it has a strong message. A piece of criticism would be to find a certain pattern and to stick with it, sometimes long verses overpower the rhyme/pattern. The material is wonderful but a definite pattern could be there. Nonetheless, still a nice poem :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Lucy!

[Terry O'Leary]

"god, music and weed"... sounds like the holy trinity!
Nice poem!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Terry.
One of many hehe

[Tomoe Tellez]

I really really loved this, the rhymes, the words and the honest and wisdom they carry, they sound so sincere and not just like a overly dramatic poem full of big emotional lines that have no story to tell.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Your superpower to me will always be your seemingly effortless way of total honestly even when it might hurt. its like an open vein to your soul. This piece was no different. From beginning to end it was authentic and so true to your voice. Awesome

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmingham]

*You're :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Crystal, you make me blush
I do my best, well half best hehe

[AaronFreitas]

"When I’m good I’m good and when I’m bad I’m bad,
But I do the best to be the best me."
I loved those lines... plus I only have God, music and weed. Sometimes that's all we need. Awesome write :)

[sinNsincerity]

S**t, that's all I need...

[Ruth]

I think the sensitive and artists among humanity cope in unique ways...writing being one, tangible piece...

[sinNsincerity]

Writing does the job for me, but so does drinking and smoking hehe
Thank you Ruth!

[Celie Rose]

Express your pain in writing. It is far better than keeping in inside. It can be real relief."It’s not what I want,
But what I need." I feel you. Good job!

[sinNsincerity]

Indeed it does help.
Thank you so much for reading.

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

We can help ourselves writing our feelings down, even the bad ones. I'm convinced of this thought. I've done it a lot of times and it helps sometimes. Good poem, inspiring text. :) Rudi

[sinNsincerity]

Very much so it helps and I'm forever grateful for it!

[SheIsMe]

As with you, writing is my outlet. It's prevented many a bad choice as well as walked me through some tough times. Keep at it. You have a gift.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you hon!

[Southern_Writes]

Very true in the fact that art is a safer way for people to express thoughts and feelings that normally are hard to do otherwise and sometimes safer.

[sinNsincerity]

Very much so, I would destroy so many lives as well as my own if it weren't for writing.

[Emily]

Love the way you started it!
Keep on writing!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily!