How Bad is Bad?

How Bad is Bad?

She said to let her go in alone.

I replied, "Let’s go in alone together."

Two lonely natives, city lives, and living wild; though, raised to love...

We intermingled with others, while searching for a better name.

Atticus, she's dragging the lake.

She loves the pain, she is beyond dangerous, she’s insane!

She will never make it to the morning because at night she always forgets my name.

She's murder, robbing me of my thoughts and well being.

The echoes of her darkest words ever said bleed through my veins.

Mental tattoos, far from being forgotten.

The pain is refreshed as my heart is rotting.

Soon I’ll be heartless, the question that remains is will she take my soul?

Who is she?

She is me!

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Seems more like the inner demon we hold inside us which takes over us only too often...

"Two lonely natives, city lives, and living wild; though, raised to love..."
This line attracted me the most. Also "let's go in alone together" was a good one.
Interesting twist at the end.. I enjoyed reading this.

[sinNsincerity]

Indeed and I have written about my inner demon in other poems as well.
I'm glad you like those lines Yumma!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, sNs! A pleasure reading this :))

[Rei Ta]

Enjoyed this! :) What inspired you to write it?

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Loretta. I was analyzing myself and my past. And how I once let myself lose myself
by all means...

[Rei Ta]

Wow, no wonder it sounds so real.

[sinNsincerity]

147 % real!

[Rei Ta]

okay, okay..I see..aha

[JayceeC]

I think we all have an alter ego that clings to the dark things in our lives. We continue to battle it until we no longer have strength, then we let it take over just until we can take cover once again, hoping for as little damage as possible. But seriously Sin should I be worried you have multiple personality disorder?? LOL. I know your good, man.

Now for the real stuff: I do not like how obvious you are in the last two lines. I think you could circle back to the line before it and use it. Also that line could use a line break after "heartless". That ending seems like the easy way out, you ended it too soon, and took the easy way out as a writer.
The rest works

[sinNsincerity]

I have few hehe, but it's okay and there's no worries. I 've learned how to let go of my ego. That's why I call it a super ego, being that I acknowledge it.
Thank you for reading Jaycee.

[JayceeC]

Very Freudian of you Sin. { :-D) ~jan

[sereenaoutloud]

Wow this is great! "Mental tattoos, far from being forgotten." love this.
How bad is bad? such a broad spectrum but regardless i refuse to change your names so Sweet you have to be lol!!

[sinNsincerity]

I love sweet sin!
Thank you for reading Sereena.
You're the bestest! lol

[sereenaoutloud]

you are always welcome!
Awww you are the bestest too...we are totally BFF's now Lol :))

[sinNsincerity]

Totally! I will be honored to be so =D

[sinNsincerity]

No take-backs

[sereenaoutloud]

hahahhah :)) omg haven't heard that in years...oh no now i feel old! lol

[sinNsincerity]

I doesn't show, so it's all fine =D

[sereenaoutloud]

and that is why you are called Sweet sin! :))

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Something really pulls me to this. A certain JE NE SAIS QUOI! It must be the mystery. It must be your tongue. It must be the ambiguity. It must be the darkness. Eh, them women always attracted to bad things ;). Really hard to tell, but I love this!

[sinNsincerity]

Oh Nadia, I'll leave you with the mystery then hehe ;)

[Ishita Dixit]

How do you pull off this stuff?
And we're not alike. Your mind is at a greater level!
I get bored of things faster than you can say Hong Kong, but,
this poem...I read twice!
Favourite line: 'Let's go in alone together.'
Great job! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Ishita

[Ishita Dixit]

You're welcome!

[ANTO]

"I replied, "Let’s go in alone together." - so cool-ly penned Sin
Bad is relative I suppose. But if we consider ourselves as too bad even for ourselves to live with then a survival technique that might involuntarily kick in is a splitting of the person. Much easier to blame our worst deeds on a fictional persona.
You're writing circumvents 'unicorn world' and 'fluffy poodle-ville' and always heads straight for 'Heavy-weight hill', my friend.
:)

[sinNsincerity]

It is much easier to blame it on my other half hahah
"Unicorn world and poodle-ville," best review ever!
Thank you for reading my friend!

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

LOLOLOL @ Anto!

[nazia]

Its deep and a bit of dark and I like it..
especially where you say
she's dragging the lake.
She loves the pain, she is beyond dangerous, she’s insane!
Exquisite :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank You Nazia! you are too kind. =D

[Jamestown]

This is again so deep! I love your writing more then I think you know,
this is amazing, to express the inner battle of self using her as a metaphor
is brilliant, " mental tattoos " cool word play!
Thanks for sharing your amazing poetry b-blessed!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you James! Glad you enjoyed it.