Untittled

You hit me like a rock to a windshield "

Shattered and scattered to never be seen through...

I'm one with the wind, so I'll remain as a traveling man 'till the day we meet again.

It kills to never be loved in the same way, so I place my sorrows within.

Is this part of God's plan?

I have shaky hands because I don't have an others to grasp.

Once again I'm left alone with the friend inside of my head.

I'm beyond going in ~~~~>

Open ends; rather that, a broken lens.

My hope is far from a belief.

And my heart is past half dead.

Leaning on a broken ledge to be place on the other side of the edge.

Your soul was mine to pledge, but it was also lost with the wind.

The end never met the beginning while in the blend.

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Wow, this is deeply meaningful, personal as well as personal and beautifully expressed and felt.
It projects such deep emotions that touch you deep within on reading it. And its rawness of the soul and spirit that is broken by this love. And always will be held on a pedestal for this person and how he lost it. And will never forget his chance.

[jeannemarie coulter]

You hit me like a rock to a windshield "

Shattered and scattered

the above image really reached into my soul/center...very fine penning, my friend...

[sinNsincerity]

Mmm... that was so great to hear.
The rock to the windshield symbolizes someone who showed me a love so great and the shattered and scattered tells how another may not ever amount to theirs.

[Devious13]

very moving this [piece and i can and did feel it as i read through it , i hope that you keep the good work up and continue the passsions that you have for the poetry ,,

[sinNsincerity]

I will indeed do my best to hold onto to my passion and it is such a pleasure to hear this from you.
Very grateful!
Thank you so much for reading.

[Devious13]

well its my pleasure i have used my writing as a therapy to my pain and experience and the poems that i have shared are nit the deepest ones but i intend to share more in sue time but reading this shows me that you are very talented yet you hold back i feel try the next piece to give all of the emotions that you are feeling at the time and what you are writing about , and let me know i am very anxious to know what comes of it

[sinNsincerity]

It is very therapeutic to me as well and sometimes it's torture. Sometimes it's very difficult for me to recollect memories and relive them again. I also agree when you say the ones you share are the deepest ones. The poems I make in my head, but then slips away, the ones never written are always my favorites.
But I never feel like my writing is up to par where I want it to be, but I'm getting there.
I will indeed let you know when I write an other and thank you so much for thinking I'm talented hon. i really appreciate it.

[Ana B.]

A beautiful, emotional piece, a bit sad, a bit raw....just like life is. Lovely job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Ana for reading, you are too kind.

[JayceeC]

Beautiful metaphor and analogy of the windshield. I always love to see what creative imagery you're going to give Sin. I love that the wind (fate/God's hand) flows through this; meandering through the write to make the imagery very cohesive. I remember the days of never getting a relationship right and praying for God to send the man who was meant to for me. It took a while, but He did. It will happen for you. Maybe she's not ready for you, yet.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Jan! I thought really hard on that metaphor.
And yes, I believe so as well. I'm waiting patiently. All I can do is put myself and my heart out there and pray someone will see me for who I am.

[JayceeC]

Love is usually found when you least expect it.

[wordman]

love the universal language but i pick up sadness and lonileness
and traveling from place to place like the wind

[sinNsincerity]

More like traveling from relationship to relationship and just trying to get it right with someone who won't give up on the relationship so easily. I don't know, I grew up believing when a relationship had its down side, you didn't throw it away, but worked at it...

[wordman]

well thats the way i always heard it should be,but if you have a lot of down sides maybe it wasn`t supposed to be .but on the lighter side it`s fun looking

[Sesame]

The futility of love..

Are those symbols chosen deliberatly for styling your poem?

Regards, Sesame

[sinNsincerity]

Yes! Every word and how I choose to spell it, the way I use it along with the symbolism, metaphors, and similes in my writing is very deliberate. =D
Thank you so much for ready Sesame!

[Ruth]

Really gives the meaning of the chaotic sensation of loving...never easy...potent piece :)

[sinNsincerity]

Never easy, but always worth it!
Thank you for ready Ruth.

[Breana Seabrooks]

Great visuals going on here.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Breana!

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

Open ends; rather that, a broken lens.
My hope is far from a belief.
And my heart is past half dead.

I really liked the flow and vibe of this one. It spoke to loss and pain but also had a hint of beauty of love. really spoke to you as a poet. great job

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for acknowledging that Crystal! We must always see the beauty in pain or else it would all be for nothing...

[TheOne&Only]

I agree, that this is an emotional piece. A great write, thank you for sharing.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you hon! always a pleasure =D