Untittled

You hit me like a rock to a windshield "

Shattered and scattered to never be seen through...

I'm one with the wind, so I'll remain as a traveling man 'till the day we meet again.

It kills to never be loved in the same way, so I place my sorrows within.

Is this part of God's plan?

I have shaky hands because I don't have an others to grasp.

Once again I'm left alone with the friend inside of my head.

I'm beyond going in ~~~~>

Open ends; rather that, a broken lens.

My hope is far from a belief.

And my heart is past half dead.

Leaning on a broken ledge to be place on the other side of the edge.

Your soul was mine to pledge, but it was also lost with the wind.

The end never met the beginning while in the blend.

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Wow, this is deeply meaningful, personal as well as personal and beautifully expressed and felt.
It projects such deep emotions that touch you deep within on reading it. And its rawness of the soul and spirit that is broken by this love. And always will be held on a pedestal for this person and how he lost it. And will never forget his chance.

[Kaede16]

Strong imagery, and very nostalgic and melancholic. It transported me for a minute.Sometimes is hard to find the right words to explain one's feelings but I'd say you nailed it with this one. Pain creates beautiful art and we might be tempted to stay trapped in it. Hope everything is going well.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for ready.
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[Pete]

so deep, powerful and emotional. very reflective with strong imagery that leaves a lasting impact. you pose a great question in the middle - 'Is this part of God's plan?' especially like the opening and last 7 lines. starts off strong and never lets up ... :)

[Saraswati]

Passionate and earthy..nothing seems forced and contrived..s good write

[annalysiar]

Deep. I like this
Great write

[Lavi]

Wow this is intense. Love it. The last two lines gave my the chills - in a good way. Like I understand, kind of way. The entire poem has a deep reflective tint to it drenched in angst and wonderings. I am glad you have shared this with me. Finding such dark rawness of people expressed so openly is not one to be taken for granted.

[trying_to_write]

This is an amazing piece, I must’ve read it 2 or 3 times. very well done

[Wild Rose]

Sounds like a chance meet You were taken so deep
Yes it can be painful when you part

Go on your travels with an open heart and mind
eys and ears alert
There wil be more out their for you to find and choose from

Happy travels

[sereenaoutloud]

what a impact this makes...the windshield shattered, the traveling man, the shaking hands , open ends, broken ledge.....wow Sweet Sin this is so strong and sad too with just fantastic imagery!
LOVE it Bestie.!! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Bestie! I'm so stoked that you loved it!
This is an old gem... I could never come up with a tittle for this one...

[sereenaoutloud]

It is really awesome.... It can be hard coming up with title some times! I thought you chose untittled and not because you were stuck for one as it is fitting for the write....

[sinNsincerity]

It sort of does suit it. The poem sort of speaks for itself...

[alf]

Hi Sin. Wow!! This so open and expressive while veiled and deep!!! I loved this!! You have an amazing ability to reach out and grab the attention of a reader and keep them absorbed. Why are some of the best writers on this site not read??? Something is wrong when pieces like this are not viewed!!! alf

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Alf, I really appreciate that!
Well all I could do is feature it and send out read request...
I'm just grateful for the one who do read and it means even more when someone can get something from it. That all makes it fine...

[alf]

Love your work!!! I don't mind how many read requests I get, I will always read them!! Just now I am trying to clear a backload, in excess of a 190 so it just may take a few days for me to read.