Your Ways of Inertia

My poetry is what makes me happy;

but if I were happy, I wouldn't need the poetry to be.

I see your hearts breaking without opening your chest,

so I rest underneath to catch the tears

because that's what you'll express when you have nothing left.

To look inside and say you feel numb,

but numb is still one greater than none.

The older I get my heart feels young;

the flesh is none without my soul

and my soul is none without one.

My mind spewing out like a hot gun

because love is all I want!

Spirit resurrecting without passing the sun.

Then God’s son came down to allow my body more than one love.

Unconditional love was injected into my blood.

Sacrificed the vices for the nicest love from above.

Some say f**k love

because their love has been fucked!

Lightning struck and I reached out my hand to pick you up.

And if you didn't need my help,

you could always find me without yelp.

You got yourself,

but know I got yourself just as well.

Wishing on a well and not a star because what goes up must come down.

Your ways of inertia.

Your steady inconsistency took the best of me…

And that’s okay.

Out of control when you try to grasps the things

You cannot control

Because you have never held a hold.

Reviews

[Asante]

Wow, brother. This was really something that hit me on a deep-rooted, personal note. Speaking to some of my yesterdays with this one.
J.Cole said "don't save her, she don't wanna be saved.." and in relation to this, it can fit right in seamlessly.
Some have been broken beyond knowing how to really receive love, even as the love is genuine. It comes as a defense mechanism against their own yesterdays.
Great write of yours, bro. Even if I'm late to the dance.

[sinNsincerity]

Love J. Cole and his Friday Night Light. Totally forgot to add dude to our list haha
And I think that is where I'm stuck stuck, I no longer know how to receive it, so I just give it out 'till someone else takes it.I have one lady I've been hot and cold with for seven years now, but the timing is never on point. It's just not as simple as it used to be. We're all fucked up lol

[Tionge Rosalie Johnson]

You must teach me your talents when it comes to rhyme, because I'm not good at it at all. You use rhyme really affectively and it totally goes with the poem. For instance, "Lightning struck and I reached out my hand to pick you up," is an excellent use of rhyme because it evokes great imagery, therefore adding to the intensity of what the narrater feels for the other person.

Lastly, I've also been in the narrators position before, countless times. I often feel like I'm the only one making the effort while the other person either uses me or doesn't seem to care as much. I'm so glad you touched on this topic! Keep up the good work!

[sinNsincerity]

It was really tough to learn without making it sound cheesy, but I have recently been trying to unlearn or use it as little as possible.
I took an English class once, Creative Nonfiction, and we focused on consonance, assonance, and alliteration a bunch. I'm certain If you looked into it; it would totally help.
Yea, it does suck to be in that situation. It is tough to find that balance between a couple, and it does suck when one has to carry all the weight.

[Reason4Rissa]

I love this, I can feel the passion for love and it's awesome how much i get exactly what you mean, passionate is deep.

[sinNsincerity]

Passion is simple, but compassion is what I strive for!

[Nina H.]

This so deep. Well written. A very beautiful piece.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank so much for thinking so Nina!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

opening of one's chest, how perfectly beautiful, a talented piece that lays heavy on ones heart, well done, good read.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Thomas.

[Eli Castor]

The things you write are often so deep I find myself getting lost in the words, which is amazing. Keep doing what you do

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Eli, I really appreciate that.

[thaleeyaLuna]

Amazing poem. :) What unique and great style in writing you have! I can tell this one's different from your other poems because you used less metaphors and abstract words. Still, you wrote it well.Keep writing! And thanks for inviting me to read. :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so, I like to allow the poem to take on a life on it's own and evolve whenever it likes. I try not to stick with one style of writing and I'm still leaning new ways of writing as I study them...

[Davidgeo]

This goes back to when I mentioned only liking half of what you write (but really liking the good half a great deal; you're an excellent author).

Your writing here is average but the idea is tremendous. .

I'll give you 1.25 bitcoins for the essence of this poem.

Or... you can send me a private message and I will you give undeniably awesome suggestions. (just sell me the idea dude)

[sinNsincerity]

That's all good, I got into writing knowing I won't convince a 100% of my audience. Everything isn't for everyone. Just a chosen few. That keeps me from being self-conscious and allows me to speak my mind, body, soul, heart and beyond...
I don't want no bit coins. Green smells better...

[Davidgeo]

Ha... well said.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

A very beautiful and heartbreak poem about love. Another great poem of yours :) good job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Always a pleasure Lauren!

[Fahmida Mehreen]

In life, there are some emotions that we classify as love but in true sense they remain undefined. It is unconditional, it is restless, it is eternal. While nothing lasts forever, some things are never-ending. I found reflection of such "something" in your words.

Looking forward to read more of your wonderful works. :)
Happy writing!

[sinNsincerity]

And to reach the hieght of unconditional love, I learned to become selfless by all means. Not to make me look good, I just believe everyone's day can use a tad bit of sugar in their tea. It has drained me, but it's worth it.

[Fahmida Mehreen]

I am sure it is worth it!

[Polly]

This stanza:

"To look inside and say you feel numb,
but numb is still one greater than none.
The older I get my heart feels young;
the flesh is none without my soul
and my soul is none without one."

All I can say is "Wow, you're a great poet!" And you really are, with that funny, sarcastic, but complex voice of yours. This was an amazing read, good job. :)

[sinNsincerity]

'though life continues to chip pieces of me away, I truly have to show my true self, but I'm still empty for some reason..? I'm still and will continue to search.
But my voice, I remember searching for it, and when I did, I discovered or realized that I have hundreds. I want people to get to know them all because they aren't so one dimensional. And that goes for you as well.