Anamoly

sad rant

Words and terms 

written with rhyme

bound in rhythm

reader a victim

As time flies

so does

 my making lies

hard to fantasize

in turn vulgarize 

laced with irk 

sanity lurks 

covered in plight

there goes

my light

Same stories play

as reels fray

news is a game 

political strain

routine a glitch

'let's find

someone to snitch'

why does one do that?

be a carnivorous rat

ruined is my appetite 

nothing anymore satisfies 

Author's Note

Good or bad, say whatever you have to say.

Reviews

[Jeyanthi]

Good...
An apperation in odd time... makes the writer to take the pen again...

[Marshall]

Good honest rhyme with interesting detail. Great

[Sebastian Romero]

Soo good! Loved the opening and closing lines

[Aswin R Prasad]

You really have a great way of framing sentences that gives the poem a flow..
If your not a rhyme fan and if your just experimenting,You should do this more often 'cuz i myself is into raps and rhymes and i think this is really catchy!

You know,You don't have to stick to the standard procedure always.. ;) Try something unorthodox and i'm sure you'll be surprised with what you can come up with..

Great write! Thanks for sharing such a lovely write!
Looking forward to read more of your works in the near future! :)

[M P Ramesh]

sindu,

words are twined with internal rhythm when poet/writer infects them.The issue is that how he/she(writer) plays on them. There appears no end for his/her mating. It naturally discharges and make the readers infected immediately. It is universal law which dictates the programme. Once it starts grow inside the reader, there begins the creation in its full meaning.

carry on...........


M P Ramesh

[KWP]

I like this - you playing with form makes me smile :) I like the pace and the flow and the questions and the thought and the commanalities in life as well as the continual momentum of mind .... yes X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am really intrigued by this...i like the natural rhythm....i am not a rhyme fan and rarely do it unless it just pours out that way...this sounds like that....just a pouring out of a very playful and creative mind.

after a while our words seem to get tasteless and stale, and we lose our appetites for writing...

and then for some reason the appetite comes back on its own...
and our pens gobble up the white space on that paper.

[Sindu]

Thank you so much! That made my day! I agree, I'm neither a rhyme person. I feel it constricting me anthe pressure doesn't let me write. But I'm trying to learn to work with bounds. This definetly is one which flowed by itself like you said. I think it's time my pen gobbled up some pages already! Thanks again.

[ANTO]

OMG ~ I want the two minutes spent reading this, back !!
Kidding my friend. I got the feel that the reader was being apologised to from the off for this one. To apologise one has to have wronged someone first - I dont feel wronged by reading this. In fact this makes me ponder whether I feel Im giving my all in my own writing and to come up with a resounding no !
You prick the conscience of the reader which we should be thanking you for - so THANK YOU Sindu.
:))

[Sindu]

THANK YOU to you too- except that first line where I went ' what? Why?!'
I like your perspective. In a way I did write it wondering who I will victimize now. Also some times when I was. Every good writer, someones who is at a constant battle to better it will probably get a resounding no,i think =)

It's been an honor pricking your conscience!

[Mayank]

oh! these days are tedious even rats are having more fun than human, they ate my shoes, cables, couch etc.

[Sindu]

Ever saw how giant those teeth marks are! Wonder how giant they will be.. Keep a bat or a broom and whack those little spawns of underground, will ya!