Paranoia

Who is it? OR what is it?

Everywhere I go

 

Everywhere I see

 

I find YOU staring

 

             Staring

         back at me

 

with those eyes 

so 

vividly.

Author's Note

Critic. Suggest. Share your mind :)

Reviews

[~]

Who is it? Tell me and I will hire a hitman ;)

[Sindu]

So sweet of you, moon. First let me find who can make me creepy crawly, then I will ping you and you can do your thing ;) :P

[KWP]

I think I would prefer to hear what you think about your last two poems? X :D

[Sindu]

M(r)s. Elizabeth, when you say things like that, its a problem.
My mind started yapping..
read moreM(r)s. Elizabeth, when you say things like that, its a problem.
My mind started yapping..
'what does she mean by hearing me?'
'Analysing me, lol?'
'Does she think there is something wrong with me?'
'Is something wrong with me?'

Then to make the matters worse, word 'BIPOLAR' in a huge font sprawled on advertisment strip in middle of the screen did not help the matters

' Bipolar- a funny thing'
'it's a scary position to be in'
'Am I bipolar?'
'No I cannot be bipolar'
OHGod! I am bipolar'
No I am not..

Not good, not good at all..

[Sindu]

Can you read more when you press 'read more'?

[ANTO]

a bit of crazy formatting - a different font some and creative use of white space between the lines and phrases could help amplify the feelings of paranoia, which are terror and the complete disjoint between reality and imagination Sindu. The poem contents are grand though.
:)

[Sindu]

YES! That's what this needs! Thank you. So check it out when this is eerie-fied..

[Sindu]

Mr. ANTO, is it eerie-fied enough?

[ANTO]

Yes Miss Sindu - the difference was immediate when I opened the page. You rock !!
What do you think of it, dear writer?

[Sindu]

Thank you thank you... Bows or should it be curtesy?.. Whichever..
I like it! But I want some colour and eerie eyes..

[ANTO]

Oh-kaayyyyyy then ... hmm.. colour and dodgy eyes...
So tell me, Sindu, when did this all start... lol

[Sindu]

some things should be left out of discussions for the sake of sanity and not waking the volatile entity within

[ANTO]

I was going to say 'Thus Spake Zarathustra' but it sounds like 'thus spake The Hulk' would be more appropriate lol .

[Sindu]

only if I could understand..

[Sindu]

Btw leave hulk alone

[Pushkar Prabhat]

Awww............brilliant..........
you are a great writer........saying so much in so little.......
i loved it!!!
:)

[Sindu]

Thank you ji :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

ji be he na ji...............!!! :) :)

[Sindu]

>:( ......

[Sindu]

Check it now.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

NOPE..........it is still awesome........