Sweetest Dreams

The signature click of the clock

spreads a miasma undeniably sweet

Drowns every hope, every plea

Transfigures every minute detail

clogs every crack and crevice

in and out, surrounding me.

As my hands start to clam

eyes close in despair, unknowingly 

setting the mental demons free.

Lungs suffocate within their confines

contract and expand to breath

as the pulse plummets down

shaky breathe stutters past my lips

desperate to taste the words of plea.

A tingling passes down my neck

arches my spine in a blasting pain

tears trickle past my open eyes

trying desperately to break free,

from his toxic serenading tune

twisting and tugging at my sanity.

He slowly brushes those cold digits

tantalizingly down my breast to navel

chuckles darkly in my ear

promising, ' sweetest dreams, my sweet!'

Reviews

[Jamestown]

This is well thought and written, the words chosen for this piece are really
well selected and very intriguing, they give the reader great imagery and
really suck the reader into what the author is experiencing, thanks for sharing
and b-blessed!

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot James. I believe it's a great feeling when a poem can do that, that too, mine :)

[Jamestown]

Absolutely I agree, thanks for sharing!

[TheLostMind]

Wow. Wonderful write.

"A tingling passes down my neck
arches my spine in a blasting pain
tears trickle past my open eyes
trying desperately to break free,
from his toxic serenading tune
twisting and tugging at my sanity.
He slowly brushes those cold digits
tantalizingly down my breast to navel
chuckles darkly in my ear
promising, ' sweetest dreams, my sweet!'" - magnificent. I loved the flow, the description in this one. Felt like a tour where you just follow the guide awestruck by what you are seeing.

Good job.. And Good night.. Did you hunt a komodo? :P

[Sindu]

Tch tch! Don't be struck in that place for too long, he will drag you under :P thank you TLM btw :)
Oh yes! I'm in the process of buying a bait and a cozy net online. As soon as I'm done I will swim there B)

[TheLostMind]

A bait to hunt a Komodo?. See, this is precisely why I urge people to play Far Cry :P

[Sindu]

Come on! No video game references now. You want me to shoot it :/ how does that work as a pet? Unless you want to cuddle a dead body O_o

[TheLostMind]

Ya.. Komodos are really fluffy. Nice animals to share a bed with :P

[Sindu]

Also goop dripping with claws and teeth.. Rawr. I bud you safe journey :P

[TheLostMind]

Bid me? LOL..

[Sindu]

Yup. Bid you :D

[TheLostMind]

Okies.. Will try to hunt a komodo with my rifle.. You try it with your "bait" .. GN :)

[Sindu]

I'll tranquilizer it or my idea of bait is food :P ok get your beauty sleep