The Rising..

A tomb of flowers

Cacophony of lovers

Named peace and sane

Their forms slowly wane

As the darkness clouds

Unleashing the hounds.. 

Author's Note

Ignore the third line and it takes a whole new meaning! A cousin asked me, 'Is this a satire of sort?'
I wanted the third line to be a shout out after I had put down the first two, which created a very different picture than intended. Other than the usual form of rise of evil against good, I would love to know what other interpretations you can think of!

Reviews

[Parimal Pratyush]

What's stated is pretty true! Evil rises against the good, good never rises against evil. It is tolerant to it. It lets evil be. On the other hand evil is envious and can't stand the cool vibes of good and hence wants to end it. This was pretty thought provoking. I am myself a lover of short poetry for the same reason that it is open for a lot of interpretations. Loved it. :)

[Sindu]

Thanks for such a cool review Pratyush!! Enjoyed it. It's one of those days when few words worked out fine and ... Voila! It makes sense.

[Parimal Pratyush]

Haha! Yes. I just published a short poem, too. Maybe you can check it out.(self-advertisement) ;)

[Sindu]

Sure.. Hey! Best kind haha ;)

[Stonz P.]

This one has a deep undertone to it and certainly adds a layer with the third line.
I could only think of 'loss' and 'alienation' to suitably fit to the lines as another interpretation.
Clever write.

[Sindu]

Thanks buddy! Ahh.. Those two are new. I like that interpretation. Makes it paint in different strokes

[Haley Wilson]

I pictured darkness and evil rising. Shadows taking over the world, as an evil and forlorn night stripped away the beauty of daytime. It's amazing what reading words on a screen (or page) can bring to life in your imagination!

[Sindu]

Thanks Haley! I like what you see... Day stripped away into darkness. Yep! Words are ridiculous like that and we all are whipped :)

[Avinash]

Good imagery you were able to create with your fine words Sindu. I enjoyed reading it.

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Avinash!

[Mayank]

I first had vague picture in my head of lovers, hound and moon. I tried to connect all of them. The tomb of flowers were more like a children in a grave and at some distance, the lovers fought loud. Maybe, it was their loss. Or, tomb of flowers because lovers fought. The flowers were wilted and dead. Named peace and sane, were more like orbits slowly disappearing and appearing with the shift of darkness. The hounds were circling around the house, they were hungry...

[Sindu]

Oh my! Now that's a picture to look at! Brilliant Mayank, that you can see a while new picture in this :D
I may have or you may have to try and wrote that. Thank you so much!

[MomzillaNC]

A kind of retelling of Pandora's box

[Sindu]

Oh that's interesting! Definitely I can see the image.

[MomzillaNC]

:) :)

[R Smith]

feels like the rise of a dark force coming to take peace away from the world, at least its what i see :)

[Sindu]

Yep Richard! We will get our pens ready :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

evil is never dead,
it hides,
to rise,
yet again;
after good, is obsolete.........

loved it!!!
:)

[Sindu]

True, indeed! Great review, Thank you :)

[~]

I can see: decay in the first verse, discordance in the second one, (ignoring the third one:) as evil goes out to get them. Great imagery!

[Sindu]

Exactly!! That's what I envisioned when I wrote it :) Thanks a lot.

[Jamestown]

Few words, with much said!
I took it as the two incredibly different phases of life, good
& bad, or even good-vs-evil! I really enjoyed this piece, thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Sindu]

Thanks James. Oh life! It can never stay at one place :)