Anachronistic

Ambled away from the path

Never realising all it starts

Away from blemished redundancy

Carousing to a beloved resplendency 

However wrong it may seem

Right will prove it's deem

Over the glooming tune of clocks ticking

Nuggets of mask deteriorate, cracking

I fade beyond the stares of past

Simply wishing to start at last

Tilting the reasons away from me

Inward to the goal to be

Calling upon the hope, wish to be free. 

Author's Note

The word defines itself as belonging to a different time, probably past. I feel as such as well, placed in a wrong place, wrong time but not essentially craving for the past.

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

I must admit instantly to struggle with form and altogether find it difficult. So when I even attempt to do something like this I either spend hours and it just doesn't come or something does come but it means I found a way to avoid the form. Either way I struggle. Ultimately it is a skill... you seem to navigate the form without the constraints I find. Great descriptive language, straight away inviting into depths of meaning. Making one aware that meaning indeed could just be part of trying. Even if the cause seems hopeless... Try it. Why? Because nothing is cast in stone and you might be suprised by the outcome.

Full of hope.

Thank you.

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Rene! Hope is the only thing makes me aspire :) I wrote this among three days where first two resulted In Three lines and remaining all on a third day. But I did not push myself a lot to pen cos that didnot help me to frame even a meaningful sentence like you mentioned. Overall thus was fun and I'm amazed many find this as good :)

[Sindu]

Btw thank you so much for such a thoughtful review. It's always amazing to read how you add a moment, opinion, memory or something of sort to it :)

[Arjun Singh]

Aftr all d things I'v read on cafe, this was a new kind of write I never read bfore... I really likd d way u delivered it.... Nice nd keep writing :)

[Sindu]

Thanks Arjun! Glad you felt so :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting...the acrostic is done very well, but i particularly relate to this...since i am a sixties person who feels totally like a fish out of water in this modern day...

sometimes i wish to be free....like i am fading.

[Sindu]

Thanks Jacob! It's great that you relate to this.. but don't fade away :)

[sereenaoutloud]

wow this is excellent and you didn't sacrifice a single word to stay in acrostic style the write is superb...bravo girlie bravo!!

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot, Sereena! Your reviews are really refreshing over the past month when I wasn't writing much. Thanks for taking time to check mine :)

[Shivam Murari]

A brilliant write indeed. What is this form called. It's tough to carry a form and still make meaning, and you rise above the challenge and excel beautifully. Shelved.

Please read my latest poem "To Draupadi" too. :)

[Sindu]

Thank you shivam! Yes, I will :) This is an acrostic poem.

[Shivam Murari]

Okay. Thanks for the information. :)

[Rm]

You have a way with words...great job!

[Sindu]

Thank you Rocky!

[Rm]

Your welcome! :)

[AaronFreitas]

I admire your creativity with this acrostic piece. I know first hand it is not easy and you did it justice. I love your wording :D

[Sindu]

Thank you :D I did thoroughly enjoy writing this. I gave it my time, finding words and rhyme till I can convey what I want it to. Happy to see that you loved it.

[Parimal Pratyush]

Once again.. bow down to the.. bow down to the.. bow down to the queen... of best words ever incorporated into a poem that best suit them with such effortless style, that is a matter of envy. Trying to completely decode it was fun.. I didn't knew all the words here and when I was finally able to understand the gist of it, I realized how long I have to go on this path to become someone of your quality and ability. :D

[Sindu]

That made my day, dear fellow poet! Raise .. ( what does a queen say.. I have no idea)see! I'm no queen :P like I said earlier to someone else, I chomp on dictionary sometimes, haha. For this, I did. Thanks a lot. Tonnes :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Nuggets of mask deteriorate, cracking
I fade beyond the stares of past

Great write, Sindu.

[Sindu]

Thank you, Pryde :)

[Devanshu Rajput]

Being a naive poet and a novice reader, I am not worth reviewing a top-notch poem of this quality. I have came across of many acrostic poems, I found this a distinguished one, because of several reasons.

You have effectively used vocabulary, as an ornamentation tool for poetry. The extravagance in your language has lead to this marvelous piece.

Devanshu

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Devanshu! That's very much a high praise and I'm humbled :) I'm a novice too and trying to submerge myself in this beauty of words a bit by bit and that review means a lot.

[Devanshu Rajput]

You are most welcome. To be honest, It is good to see, Indians on the site. And, Happy Holi to you and your family.

[Sindu]

Thanks again and wish you the same. I know what you mean

[Devanshu Rajput]

Sorry?????

[Sindu]

Sorry? Why?

[Devanshu Rajput]

No nothing, it was a mistake......