My tainted proposal

Black valentine challenge

My story: 

His dreaming lids covered

by wisps of darkened hair,

lips slightly apart, a breath in,

All I could do was stare. 

Reminisce of way he moves,

a casual lean on a door

to cuddling as a moulded mess,

enough to curve my lips a bit more.

I vowed to never let go

his demons and mistakes, as well

affair with her, that girl

I took it as a parcel.

As he stared dazed, awake

tied up, questioning his delirious state;

sharp metal clutched in my hand

I promised that it's his designed fate.

Panic building, begging begins

as he tugs and turns to explain,

too focused on the blood trail

I poured my love into his pain.

Cuts and gashes enamoured him

as I dug his heart from cavity

burning with passionate love 

pecked his lips with severity. 

His own fault, all this love.

I moved away heart held in hand

a glint stopped my mesmerizing, 

tiny rock dropped from his pants.

My breath hitched while mind

cleared his jeweller girl 'affair'

his heart clutched to mine

all I could do was stare..  

My present:

His ring adorns my hand

enveloped by love, unrestrained;

greeting me day and night

his heart lies pickled by my bed.  

Author's Note

After a block of nearly two months, this was what I came up with ( least cringe-able)

Reviews

[R Smith]

Sindu you are the queen of horror, this can rival King in just sheer terror and pain, the poor guy only wanted to love and marry you, you gave him a heartless reply, must have been some block it made you really mad it seems but this dark humour and poetry is a good reply to any block, love it well done :)

[Sindu]

That's definitely not heartless.. It just resulted in him ending heartless. Haha
It's ok Richard, there is always a second time ;) thank you.
Yup block madness it is and the inspiration from the challenge :)

[Saddam]

That is very uncertain. Nice poem, I Read it at one breath. Very dark but fine art. Thanks for sharing.

[Sindu]

Thanks SSADD. Hope it's the anticipation that made you read in one breath. It's rare that I write something like this too.

[Saddam]

But it is very nice, Sometimes we think negative, it is necessary to express them. Your are very good writer.

[Sindu]

I agree. writing makes it better. Thanks buddy. You write good too especially your Hindi poetry flows flawlessly

[Saddam]

Thank you very much dear, Hindi write is my one mind write English is little editing work but Hindi is in my heart and those are its word.

[Sindu]

Yep. I can see that :)

[Surya pradha]

breathtaking verses. always love your poetry!

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Surya :D

[Marie]

I really like the idea of "pickled" hearts, especially since she'll have to do something to preserve the one she just dug so cruelly from his body...

[Sindu]

I have been thinking what to do with that- include here as an alternate ending or tailor it into the existing one?

[Sindu]

check now..

[Marie]

Well I like that even better...

[Sindu]

That worked, didn't it! Thank you Marie :)

[MomzillaNC]

Whoa! Definitely a cringe-worthy! Make sure you post it to "New Writing" on the group page!

[Sindu]

Guess the least cringe able version is enough cringeworthy for this.
I have a different ending to this version. I chose this.

[MomzillaNC]

This is definitely a Black Valentine's tale.

[Sindu]

The other ending involves pickled hearts..

[MomzillaNC]

Umm… that would work too.

[Sindu]

check now..

[MomzillaNC]

Oi Vey! From what heart of darkness did that come from! :D

[Sindu]

HAha :D my sister asks me similar thing

[MomzillaNC]

LOL :)