Venture Vibe!

Time to jump...

Let's be a little,

little less concrete.

Put away those cages

made of watches and badges.

Here we go!

Step up! wear your goggles,

dust those feathers, gray and blue.

Get a head start, run with the wind,

jump off the cliff, right at the end.

Woohoo!!

Dive into the waters, deep through;

flap with the fishy school,

fight those snarling sharks, heed;

try not be an eight-hand's meal!

That's close.. phew..

 

Rise up a castle

from sands and shells;

fly your flag beckoning 

the crab and crew! 

Over here!!

Ride away the prized stallion

right under the king's nose;

galloping with wind in your hair,

squires behind you to scare!

yee-haw!

Roll down a grassy green hill,

sniff those blooming flowers too.

Reds, yellows, oranges and blues,

too much pollen, ACHOO!

Oops..

Visit a country fair,

dressed up like a jewel.

Taste all those pies and tarts,

dance away to those catchy tunes..

Finally...

Lie underneath the starry sky,

make a wish, may be two;before 

you step in cubicles and cabins,

recall, the venture deep within..

Author's Note

Imagine switching between the scenes like a good Disney song :)

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

An imaginative romp…

NOTES: Maybe try to shorten some of the longer lines to hold the lyrical rhythm.

[Sindu]

Thanks Momzi! Can you point them out, please?

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Meter is basically a matter of counting syllables. Below are suggestions for the two that, for me, most interrupted the flow:

Step into cubicles and cabins,
Remember, adventure [resides] deep in you…

[Sindu]

Got it, Thank you again.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WOW!!! fun filled joy ride!!!
it transports you to a wonderland!!
Brilliant poetry!!
Loved it!!!!!
:)

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Mr. Nese! Glad you liked it :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome, Ms Gifted........i loved it!! :) :)

[Sindu]

My bad.. Glad that you loved it! ;)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

yup!! that i did!! :D