Your loss is mine to weep

how we get hurt when someone close to us goes through something bad

O friend o' mine

Bumbling buzzling ball of energy.

twinkling laughter; mischief filled eyes.

propellor of spirit in life.

Sadly, left as a memory of before.

O friend o'mine

drained, cooped up in a corner,

lines of strain; horror- struck eyes,

fragment of soul, tormented for life.

Painfully, b*****d of truth left after.

O friends o' mine

all who never were mine,

I comprehend a modicum of pain,

friends o' yours comprehend.

Forlorn, you lost an intricate part of you;

as did they, through you..

Author's Note

Any tragic situation can change a person. Let it be physical or mental abuse, accident, loss of a loved one... or family deserting; the people around them face a great loss through that person.

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

It is so true that when someone we love is hurting, we feel it too. Empathy is a crazy thing that way. This was such a sad poem, but still sweet because you are reaching out to those in pain in the best way you know how, hoping to perhaps take some of the burden off of them. Beautiful.

[Sindu]

Thanks Ashira! It's good to know this touched you. It's just better to share even a little of it than shutting them away.

[Surya pradha]

a interesting piece. i agree with your thoughtful note.

[Sindu]

Thank you Surya!

[Briana O'Connor]

This is a deep and moving piece. Such sadness and hopelessness is portrayed here. Watching from the side lines is a difficult burden to carry. Powerlessness is apparent here. Note-In the 2nd to last line a should be an. Thank you for sharing. Well penned.

[Sindu]

Thanks Briana for the read and review :)

[Stonz P.]

This is well-written... The alliterations and the structure are good.
And uhh.. in the last stanza, you wrote 'modicum pain', it will be 'modicum of pain'.
Other than that, a good write.
Good to have found you :-)

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot! That part.. I was about to change it then.. my wifi keeps crashing :/
I will change it.. Thanks!

[Frieda P]

Moving piece Sindu....we are indeed touched by experiences in our lives and sometimes they change us for the better, many times the opposite holds true. Well said.

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Frieda! Yep the opposite can create some similar results in a different way too. I can feel this more now. So, there goes..

[Frieda P]

It's always interesting to me how people respond to tragedy in their lives, we're all individuals, there's not a one size fits all when it comes to emotions, some people turn to religion as many turn away, many see it as a time to live with intent, others only see gray skies....much food for thought here.

[Sindu]

I see what you mean. I have come across all categories you described, my own self included. Also then there are who find ways to come in terms with them and thus let them go or lessen them some how in a creative manner.

[Frieda P]

Such as poetry....write on. :)

[MomzillaNC]

Very touching write. And, yes, people are changed by tragedy, sometime irrevocably; when that happens, it's like the person you knew… the person they were, dies.

Of course, a person can be changed by joys and love too. And, the person they become may be so radically different that those they knew before can no longer know them. As someone in this category, it can be incredibly difficult to let go of those who knew you before you found the happier you. I guess that's a kind of loss too, for those who knew the tortured me and just couldn't embrace a freed soul.

Did you mean "…a modicum [of] pain?"

[Sindu]

That's true too. Some form of success or joy can form ledges of difference which can make one loss their dearest.. clouded by the change. Thanks a lot for a great review as always momzilla!

Yup, I meant that. I typed it wrong.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Happy to help.

[Sindu]

Did you experience something like you said with someone or may be your own self?

[MomzillaNC]

My own self. I found a path to happiness and wholeness. I became a person some people from my past (sadly, including some of my own family) couldn't learn to know. They kept trying to pull me back into that tortured soul. I had to let those people go from my life; it's hard to mourn the loss of someone you have to keep seeing all the time.

[Sindu]

Sorry about that. Truly. Also I wish strength for your happiness. I saw such circumstances too within my friends.
If you don't mind can I write about that?

[Sindu]

And my very own family is going through something similar.. Their family deserting.

[MomzillaNC]

It's a very difficult thing. Sadly, our tragedies give others power; and they are unwilling to see us grow strength enough to break their power/strangle hold upon us.

[Sindu]

A sad truth indeed. But greatness always erupts from pain and struggle. So, that explains how you are better now. :)

[MomzillaNC]

That's part of the solution. I was blessed with a friend who led me to the right path and back to Faith. And, she's still my best friend and confidant.

[Sindu]

That's all anyone needs. One who can help you fight millions. Give her a pat on the back from me :)

[MomzillaNC]

LOL! You got it!

[hardeep sabharwal]

A sad piece, and your words are apt,, what u sad is true dear,,
and the title is touchy

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Hardeep. Yes it's a piece I felt for from title to last word.