May be my first crush!!!!!!!!!!!!

My first poem on love...............

He met me in that eye
just a spark in his eye
made me not to leave
But i moved from there in shy.


Mind and heart worked together
thinking of him the whole day passed
making me to wait further
Then suddenly he crossed!!!

Nothing I know about him
my heart blooms fresh
my thoughts are so firm
Saying him as my first crush???

He moved in hasten
even then an eye on me,its He
there i was fallen
and following him as an idol given key!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Note

As English is my second language if i made any mistake please let me know.But i don't want people to write any harsh comments........

Reviews

[Clive D Costa]

One way of expressing the true heart inside..... sharing the FEELING! liked it

[Sindhu selvi]

Oh that's true :) Thank you

[MoriartyMesa]

This felt like what we in the west call; http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wqt_iZBvtCo

or hooked on a feeling.

[Sindhu selvi]

Thanks for the comment

[Vikrantsingh]

Simply loved your work. Presence of mind is quiet stable.
Just add one word before - "Then Suddenly"
to the below lines
making me to wait further
suddenly he crossed!!!.

Good Rhyme, Good Theme
Love is endless topic to think about. Create more good themes

Cheers!!!
Vikrantsingh Parmar