I cry

I cry,

every time I see an animal,

on the side of the road,

dead.

I cry,

when I hear,

the ones I love the most,

have moved away.

I cry,

when my friends leave,

and my life,

is torn apart.

I cry,

when I see a person suffer,

because another persons,

mistake.

Reviews

[~ Otto Girl ~]

try to add more to this poem its good but needs more explanation. :)

[Zana]

oh....thats an gud poem....no lie.....and yeah same hurr

[Ruth]

The last stanza- wow!
Great poem!
Sometimes people are oblivious to their influence!
xx

[Thomas Fleet]

The last stanza really hit the mark. The poem was overall good, and I enjoyed reading it. :)

[clauds294]

I agree, watch out with your punctuation. But we're all here to learn. :) Any who, great, emotionally driven poem.

[Michael X]

nice but, your punctuation did nothing but complicate a great flow. In fact, the punctuation ruins this poem. whats with all the
cammas, see, you already have really nice line breaks going. this poem needs more time to smooth out the general mishaps like "persons" anhow, you have a great way with words, keep up the great work. and consider this practice to learn.

[John Morris]

A short but memorable piece. The last stanza the line
"Because another persons,
mistake."

You forgot the apostrophe after for "person's, mistake."

Apart from that fantastic piece.

Can You Hear The Silence? 22nd June 2010

[[KL]]

A nice piece here.. Is this actually about you this time? 'Cause it sounds like it is.. If I've read your bio correctly (: Good work again here :] Well done =D
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