My corner

I can't speak out,

my heart is anguished with pain,

I need a a shoulder,

a shoulder to cry on,

I hate not having anyone who understands,

so I hide my feelings,

and fake a smile,

but on the inside,

I have tears,

tears of pain,

hurt,

and real feelings.

Reviews

[Dream Catcher]

I like this piece because it is something that I can easily relate to and every once and awhile everyone gains a feeling like this. Sometimes when we don't have someone to listen, it's easiest to just write it out, but you did a good job on that [:

[zilla]

:O

[Zana]

thtz an interesting poem

[Ruth]

The corner representing the hidden anguish, nicely done and dark
xx

[lamia]

nice poem , emotional and real , well written :)

[Thomas Fleet]

I can really relate to this poem. So many people I've seen who feel this way...
not having anyone who understands, or anyone to talk to.
It's sad; but it's a good poem, well-written, and emotional.

[[KL]]

This is good, I just think that line five doesn't fit.. It kinda ruins the flow.. If you could think of a way to get around that problem, then this would definitely be a greater piece. Nevertheless, well done. Thanks for sharing (:
[M]

[clauds294]

With time and effort you will become a great writer. This has potential. I encourage you to keep writing and expressing yourself.

[Tate Morgan]

Is there any other kind?

[Michael X]

when writing a short poem its important to be original as possible,
i've heard the opening shoulder thing a million times, and the rest
seems cliche, but on the other hand. you have the ability to capture
emotion I can you can really go far with practice.