Another Fear

I'm still working on it but, tell me what you think of it so far. It's about my father(not step father either.).

Sitting here today,

These tears on my face,

Wondering why,

His life has end this way,

All you had to say,

is you wanted to go away,

There's no turning back,

it's risk I'm gunna take,

(chorus)

Why are you here,

You're giving me another fear,

That's why I'm never here,

All you do is drink away,

Try to hide your pain away,

You know it's gunna stay,

 

 

walking out the door,

can't take it anymore,

hanging out outside,

i can get much more,

 

don't know why I satyed,

I really want to run away,

can't show no pain,

even though,

I show it anyway.

 

Chorus x.2

Author's Note

Please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Bexfinch]

keep writing im a singer and i sung it sounds good

[lamia]

this is very good so far , keep writing !!

[Kaelyn Shea]

you have a great start here keep going and i think this will be a great hit! good job! :D

[Frantzuu]

Great write :D

[Joy Lynn B.]

Thanks for all the comments so far! I'm sure you guys may like it more when it's finished and has a title!!

[Ruth]

Nice lyrics, a little more structure maybe, a few more verses lol Could be great:) xx

[JenLyn]

It sounds way too much like a poem right now, like the words are halting. Once you make it into a song I'm sure it'll sound a lot better because your words will open up more. I look forward to reading it when it's finished. Keep writing! :)

[Not A Writer]

Can't wait to here it finished, so I can here the story complete. Good write.

[Michael X]

wow, i hear this myself as a- really rocking, metal song, but new, a real in the times riff and beat really smooth and fast. 100/100