You

Why can't I get you out of my head,

At night,

 your my dream,

During the day,

We are talking like it's our first time,

You ask the same questions,

You asked yesterday,

But the feeling inside,

Makes that fact go away,

I like you a lot,

I hope you know,

This is a moment,

I'll never let go.

Reviews

[JenLyn]

It's short, sweet and to the point, very nice flow and rhyme scheme. I did spot one grammatical error "your my dream" should be "you're my dream." Other than that it was a nice writer overall. You know I enjoy reading your writing so keep em coming. Looking forward to reading more. Great write! :)

[Zana]

ooooo so im in your ooolalala just kidding i like it

[A.Lee]

This is really good! I do agree that it seems like theres a break in the poem at the line "Ever talking at all', so i might edit that. But otherwise its a great piece. Good job :)

[Vito XYZ]

Ahhh I'm going on like crazy maniac but it's good, I don't let age play a factor in the writing but I DO think there's is a correlation between age and how in-depth the writing is. How ever I don't take that into account when I'm reading a persons work of course your works included. I like the fact I can play with your lines and there's a certain amount of logic in the writing, but I don't like the sentence "Ever talking at all," because when I think of every word and how every sentence connects that 1 line it feels like the odd one out. The writing still flows but there's a break when I think about the meaning when I pay attention to that sentence.

[Moth Phoenix]

Awwwwwwwwww very very sweet hun ^_^ Great job!! Short N Sweet!!!!