Flash Back

I have no idea where this came from. It's like it just came out.

The big flash of light,

shined through the open window,

then i hear a drop of water,

from the dark sky,

I open my eyes,

to close the open window,

I see the flash again,

and cover my eyes,

the flash back is coming,

then i hear the bang,

I scream,

try to break the cycle,

of these flashback coming in,

then I see my brother,

beside me laughing,

talking,

not knowing a life is on the line

we go through the green,

the truck goes through the red,

I wake from a come asking,

is he dead?,

my mother started to cry,

water built up in my eyes,

the flashback stopped,

so did the storm,

the last flash,

a feeling of a knife slitting in my heart,

and now,

he's gone.

Reviews

[Sidewalk]

solid write, the fourth stanza really carries the whole thing. You need to change "come" to "coma." Your use of imagery is also strong