Falling Petals

         Mother, I have failed you,

         Participated in the destruction

         Of the beautiful land you gave us.

                I have cleared away emerald life,

                And replaced it with stone,

                Building metal towers

                As hollow as my soul.

 

         Mother, I have failed you,

         Joined the hunts and butchery

         That so indifferently rip apart children.

                A decade I stood strong

                Against the cruelty of it all,

                But I was weak, and they pushed,

                And so, I did fall.

 

         Mother, I have failed you,

         Disobeying natural patience

         And giving in, throwing away the virtue

                I thought I wanted to,

                So I allowed the lust  

                To consume me,

                I thought that I must.

 

The petals fell from the adolescent tree

And fluttered in the winds of change.

I'm sorry, Mother, for growing up,

And entering a world so strange.

Author's Note

An apology to Mother Nature...
Thanks for reading (: ♥

Reviews

[Ben Taylor]

"The petals fell from the adolescent tree
And fluttered in the winds of change.
I'm sorry, Mother, for growing up,
And entering a world so strange."
Still doin that "end with a rhyme" thing I see; and it really does work well. I love analogies using the "winds of change". :)
I would have assumed this was to your actual mother, but now that I re-read it, it makes more sense your way :)
Nicely written :)

[Jake Staffeld]

Definently some good imagery here, but it leans towards the violent side.

[sushi]

Great work....

[Sukriti Suki]

Nice one.

[Dahlia Phoenix]

Sometimes we can stand strong but we are human. There will always be a time of weakness where we feel discontent with what we do.

[rwar ish me]

very good, loved it

[*[[ Cadence ]]*]

wow, very nice! i love it (:

[Midnight_Mystery]

i like it, great write! :)

[Midnight_Mystery]

i like it, great write! :)

[Morrigan Nicole]

great form!!!

[Princess3Morag]

beautifully descriptive :)