Friends!

A war story with real events happened in northern Iraq when the tyrant decided to kill his own people!

Friends!

Yousif had to go to up north with his battery to fight the Kurds, many units have moved from south and east to the north cities, towns and villages.  He was a sergeant with 3 years’ experience in the army, and went through many battles in the south against the Iranian army.  He was almost get killed many times and wounded once but he survived through those horrible battles.

He has to join this new war against his own people, it was not an optional, he must go otherwise the security men would go after him, they will not stop until they find him, if he find a place to hide they would just kidnap his family and imprisoned them so he would turn himself in. If he leaves the battle field for any reason the band executions would kill him right away.

Yousif has a big family old, his father was missed in the war and never heard anything from him for 6 years now, he left his mother with four sons and daughters they were all very young, the oldest was 12 years. Therefore he must take the responsibility to support his family and be the man of the house as he was 23 years old.  

He was in charge of logistics, so the first duty after settling down in the new site was to work on logistics for the group, he took 2 soldiers and the logistic vehicle soldier often called it (the food vehicle) and headed to the division logistic unit.  He must do this every day to bring food for the soldiers who were about 3 km deep into the enemy lines.

The division site was not very settled as everyone was moving and doing something, after he asked about the logistic unit location he went back on the vehicle and tell the driver to go forward, before they reach the logistic, he noticed chained young men surrounded by many military police personnel who are trying to have them move to another place, they are about5 meters away, he could see their frightened and tired faces. “Oh, who are these young men, what caused them to be here, maybe they are part of the Kurdish rebellion groups that fight the regime” he was talking to himself…. They could be imprisoned for many years or just executed. 

Before the vehicle pass them he shockingly saw a young man who was a student with him in college in Basra City, “Oh my god that is Mahmoud”, Yousif was almost shouting his name out but something stops him in the last second. His turned his face away avoiding him; if he recognizes me I would be in trouble, a big trouble.

The next day everyone heard that rebellions were executed and buried not far from the logistic unit.

 

Author's Note

Please give your feedback, I am a new on writing in English. Thanks for your time!

Reviews

[Minh-Anh Day]

I can sense the urgency and power behind your story; however, I believe that your lack of punctuation and correct grammar detracts from the flow of the story. Try to study English grammar a little more and split your writing into more sentences, as well as more paragraphs.

I like the way you set up the character in the first paragraph, but the second paragraph is two intense and rushed. The ending has neither a good flow nor a good "kick"; we all sort of know that Mahmoud is going to be executed.

There's potential in this story, but it does need a lot of work.

[Abdul Alsaaidi]

Minh, thanks for your review, I agree with you that it does need some work, as I was russing up writing it before the idea going away. Thanks again for your time