Masquerade

Shards of glass lay around glistening a small sharp piece catches my eye

fearfully with caution I pick up the glass

I see my distortion

I begin to cry

I see the beast inside of me

great destruction

it’s taking over me

helplessly I long to be the person that you want me to be

I’m not the monster you think I am

It’s not a mystery

but
humanity

I am only as truthful as I can be

So

I’ll ask you honestly

take this mask away from me

Author's Note

First draft

Reviews

[i am LiLy]

i feel so terrible speaking on others expression of their own emotion.......its awesome if thats how you felt at that time.....

it should be your only draft.....you felt it and its you and it was real right as you felt it then.....

true words of feeling and emotion can never be said to be wrong by anyone my friend.

thank you for asking me to read

awesome

[Rye]

I like that, "I'll ask you honestly, take this mask away from me" I like that part. very nice write

[merit]

I liked this one very much, its got depth and lovely imagery Dorian Grey came to my mind for a minute for some reason;)

[Einstein Noodle]

our shared human dilemma ... hard to find that real resting place of forgiveness we all need ...inside where the beasts and the angels reside .. well put... personally... i would not change it ..love the brutal honesty simba
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[Perdition]

Perfect..simply perfect. I imagine Mr. Jung in his estimation would find these words to fill his glass as I have. Persona removed thy name is vulnerable....first step towards light.

[Simone Davis]

Thankyou for your review

[R.E. Ray]

Good start to a promising piece. I like the imagery and emotions conveyed here. Good and bad, we rarely see the image we think we project. And, when we're depressed or in pain, we look for reflections to validate the self loathing. You've captured that here, too.

[Simone Davis]

Thank you for your review

[marilyn 1225]

well written disturbing content your sadness in not being sincere shines thru
i think your writing will help you figure it out and may help you get your feelngs out of your pent up heart thanks for suggesting we read this... people hurting people is a world tragedy....

[Simone Davis]

Thankyou for reviewing

[KCthelastboyscout]

I read this and you sound hopeless.like you're dying inside and crying for help.I like how you structured the lines in this story.every word you write is basically saying SAVE ME

[Thepensiveplayer]

A soul-searching, heart-wrenching piece. You prompt people to probe the real person they are in this world. Its something we should be comfortable with, but sometimes we tend to get discouraged by those around us. I'd say your mask is already off because your writing excellent poems like this. keep up the work.

[Jade Stone]

Beautiful yet haunting great job.